Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases; focus on pronunciation and sentence completeness.

예시: Yes, I usually look out the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy observing changing landscapes. For example, I like watching urban streets transform into countryside scenes, and I often notice interesting buildings or fields along the way.

제안: Answer directly (yes/no) first, then give a brief reason and one specific example. Use linking words such as 'because' or 'however' and avoid hesitations and incomplete sentences.

예시: No, I don't usually take photos from the car because the view moves too quickly and the images often turn out blurry. However, if I see something unusual or beautiful while stopped, I might take a quick photo.

제안: Start with a clear preference sentence, then explain briefly with specific reasons and one example. Use linking words (for example, because, although) and correct basic grammar (e.g., 'sea' not 'see'), and avoid fragmented sentences.

예시: I prefer the sea to the mountains because I have loved the ocean since childhood and find its atmosphere relaxing. For example, I enjoy swimming and watching the waves during beach holidays, which helps me unwind more than hiking in the mountains.

× Well, I strongly believe that that's the main part of.

✓ Well, I strongly believe that that's the main part of the journey.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a clear object after 'part of'; this is a sentence structure error. Adding 'the journey' completes the prepositional phrase and makes the sentence meaningful. Ensure every 'part of' phrase is followed by a noun or noun phrase.

× Join the ride when you're traveling.

✓ I join the ride when I'm traveling.

The original fragment 'Join the ride when you're traveling' is incorrectly capitalized and structured as an imperative; the student intended a first-person statement. This is an incorrect conjunction/structure use. Use the correct subject 'I' and consistent tense 'I'm traveling' to form a proper declarative sentence.

× Eddie Transport And of course I'm trying to look out the window.

✓ And of course I try to look out the window.

The phrase 'Eddie Transport' appears to be a misplacement or non-sequitur; the sentence is fragmented and improperly capitalized. This is a sentence structure error. Removing the stray words and using 'I try' instead of 'I'm trying' fits a habitual action better. Keep sentences concise and relevant.

× From my perspective, when people are taking photos of the scenery outside the car window, they're trying to catch the moment.

✓ From my perspective, when people take photos of the scenery outside the car window, they're trying to capture the moment.

The original mixes continuous 'are taking' with a general statement; for habitual/general actions use simple present 'take'. Also 'catch the moment' is less natural than 'capture the moment'. This is an incorrect use of verb aspect and idiom; prefer simple present for generalizations.

× Being said, uh, to be honest, when I'm in the car I don't usually take.

✓ That said, to be honest, when I'm in the car I don't usually take photos.

'Being said' is ungrammatical; the correct phrase is 'That said'. The verb 'take' needs an object ('photos') to complete the sentence. This is a sentence structure error. Use set phrases correctly and include required objects.

× From my perspective of all mountains at the sea.

✓ From my perspective, I prefer mountains to the sea.

The original prepositions 'of' and 'at' are incorrect in this comparative context. This is an incorrect use of prepositions. Use 'prefer X to Y' to express preference between two things.

× About that depends on the season, but.

✓ That depends on the season.

The original fragment 'About that depends on the season, but.' is ungrammatical and contains an unnecessary 'but' that leaves the sentence incomplete. This is a sentence structure error. Remove filler words and complete the clause.

× For me personally, I prefer see because this childhood I have been attracted.

✓ For me personally, I prefer the sea because since childhood I have been attracted to the ocean.

Several issues: 'see' is a misspelling of 'sea'; word order 'this childhood' is incorrect; missing preposition 'to' after 'attracted'. This is incorrect use of pronouns/word choice and structure. Use 'since childhood' for time reference and 'attracted to' for the correct preposition.

× To the ocean, and personally I enjoy holidays on the ocean rather.

✓ I have always been attracted to the ocean, and I personally enjoy holidays at sea rather than in the mountains.

The original is fragmented and repeats ideas awkwardly; 'on the ocean' is less natural than 'at sea' or 'by the sea', and 'rather' needs a comparison 'rather than'. This is a sentence structure error. Combine ideas into one coherent sentence and use natural prepositional phrases and comparative structure.