Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be careful with grammar (verb forms and articles), word choice, and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verbs and articles (e.g., "when I travel by car"). Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., "different kinds of scenery" not "several kind"). Keep it concise (max 3–4 sentences) and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word (e.g., "for example" or "so").

예시: I usually look out of the window when I travel by car because I enjoy seeing different kinds of scenery. For example, I like watching mountains and lakes pass by, which helps me relax after a long day. So I often spend the journey simply observing the view.

제안: Improve fluency by removing filler words ("umm") and fix awkward phrasing. Give a clear topic sentence and one or two specific reasons with linking words. Correct noun phrases ("landscapes outside the car window") and finish your thought—avoid incomplete sentences.

예시: Yes, I often take photos of the landscapes outside the car window because I want to keep them as memories. For instance, I photograph unusual fields or interesting buildings so I can look back at them later.

제안: Correct vocabulary errors and avoid filler words. Use the correct noun ("the sea" or "the seaside/the beach") and accurate collocations ("sound of waves", not "sound of wheels"). Structure your answer: state preference, give two specific reasons with linking words, and finish with a short concluding sentence. Keep sentences grammatical and concise.

예시: I prefer the sea because I enjoy sitting on the beach and listening to the sound of waves. This helps me reduce stress after a long day at work, and I always feel more relaxed and refreshed there. For these reasons, I choose the seaside over the mountains.

× I usually look out at the window when I traveling by car because I love appreciating several kind of beautiful scenery such as dance, mountains, sea and lake.

✓ I usually look out of the window when I am traveling by car because I love appreciating several kinds of beautiful scenery such as dunes, mountains, the sea and lakes.

Errors: missing auxiliary verb for present continuous ('I am traveling'), incorrect preposition ('look out of the window' is idiomatic), singular/plural mismatches ('several kind' should be 'several kinds' and 'lake' should be plural), and a likely word choice error ('dance' -> 'dunes' or another landscape feature). Suggestions: use 'I am traveling' for ongoing action, use 'look out of the window', make plural forms for countable nouns after 'several', and choose correct nouns like 'dunes' or 'rivers' depending on intended meaning.

× Of course, I usually take a photo of umm scenery, particularly landscaped outside the car, the window car, because I want to, umm, keep it as memory.

✓ Of course, I usually take photos of the scenery, particularly the landscape outside the car window, because I want to keep them as memories.

Errors: article and count noun misuse ('a photo of scenery' should be 'photos of the scenery' or 'a photo of the scenery'), incorrect word order ('landscaped outside the car' -> 'the landscape outside the car window'), pronoun/number agreement ('it' should be 'them' to match 'photos'), and article use before 'memories' ('as memories'). Suggestions: use plural 'photos' if you take more than one, use 'the scenery' for specific scenery, place adjectives before noun correctly, and match pronouns to their antecedents.

× Moreover, I want to.

✓ Moreover, I want to keep them.

Error: sentence fragment missing the verb object (sentence ends incomplete). Suggestion: complete the phrase with the intended verb object, e.g., 'keep them' to refer to photos.

× I prefer sea because I love sitting by the beach and listening to the sound of wheels.

✓ I prefer the sea because I love sitting on the beach and listening to the sound of waves.

Errors: article missing before 'sea' (use 'the sea' when speaking generally about sea as a preference), incorrect preposition ('on the beach' is idiomatic), and wrong noun ('wheels' should be 'waves'). Suggestions: use 'the sea' for a specific natural feature, use 'on the beach', and use context-appropriate nouns such as 'waves'.

× This activity helped me to reduce stress after a long day at work.

✓ This activity helps me to reduce stress after a long day at work.

Error: tense mismatch. The question is about preference/habit, so present simple 'helps' is appropriate rather than past 'helped'. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual effects.

× Moreover, I always feel more relaxed and live red when I, umm, sitting by the beach.

✓ Moreover, I always feel more relaxed and livelier when I am sitting on the beach.

Errors: incorrect adjective/adverb ('live red' is incorrect; intended 'livelier'), missing auxiliary 'am' before present participle ('am sitting'), and preposition 'on' is preferred with 'beach'. Suggestions: use comparative 'livelier' for feeling more energetic, include the correct auxiliary for continuous aspect, and use 'on the beach'.