Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve clarity and fluency by avoiding repetition, using one clear topic sentence, and adding 1–2 specific supporting details with linking words. Fix small grammar issues (e.g., articles and tense) and finish thoughts. Keep answer to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes. I often look out the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy observing nature and everyday life. For example, I like watching clouds change shape and seeing how people go about their day, which helps me relax during the journey.

제안: Make the response direct and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence stating frequency, then give a specific reason and one short example. Avoid unclear words (e.g., 'breads') and repetition. Use a linking phrase like 'because' or 'for example'.

예시: Not often, but I do sometimes take photos of the sunset because I love warm light and vivid colours. For example, last month I photographed a bright orange sunset that reflected on the river and saved it on my phone.

제안: Respond with one clear statement of preference, then give specific reasons and an example using linking words like 'because' and 'for example'. Correct repetition and unclear phrases (e.g., 'sun hits the border'). Keep to 2–3 sentences for conciseness.

예시: I prefer the sea because I find it more visually appealing and relaxing. For example, I enjoy photographing the beach at sunset when the warm colours reflect on the water and create peaceful scenes.

× Yes, actually, I do love, I do love looking at the scenery when traveling by a bus or car because I like to enjoy the nature, the view.

✓ Yes, actually, I do love looking at the scenery when traveling by bus or car because I like to enjoy nature and the view.

Repeated 'do love' is redundant and not a grammar list item, but the main issues are unnecessary articles and word order. 'Traveling by a bus or car' should be 'traveling by bus or car' because when speaking about means of transport we omit the article. 'Enjoy the nature' should be 'enjoy nature' (no article). Also combine phrases to avoid repetition. Suggestion: omit duplicate words and unnecessary articles to make the sentence natural.

× I like to see what people are doing.

✓ I like to see what people are doing.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change is required. It has a correct pronoun use and verb structure. Included for completeness.

× I like to to see the sun.

✓ I like to see the sun.

There is a duplicated word 'to'. Remove the extra 'to' to correct the infinitive form. This is an editing error rather than an adjective/adverb error, but correcting it improves fluency.

× I like the the clouds are my favorite thing.

✓ I like the clouds; they are my favorite thing.

Double 'the' is a duplication error. The original sentence is a run-on combining a noun phrase and a clause without correct punctuation. Split into two clauses and use a pronoun 'they' to refer back to 'clouds'. This fixes sentence structure and clarity.

× And when it's night, I feel it's much better because it's.

✓ And when it's night, I feel it's much better because the scenery is more peaceful.

The fragment 'because it's.' is incomplete and leaves the sentence without an object or complement. Provide a clear reason clause to complete the sentence. Ensure the sentence has a subject and verb in the clause after 'because'.

× It's rarely when I do it, but I really like to take pictures of the sunset because I'm a sun lover.

✓ I rarely do it, but I really like to take pictures of the sunset because I'm a sun lover.

'It's rarely when I do it' is awkward word order. Place the adverb 'rarely' before the main verb ('do') to form a natural negative frequency expression: 'I rarely do it.' This follows normal adverb placement rules in English.

× I love the sun and I love the breads.

✓ I love the sun and I love bread.

'breads' is inappropriate here; 'bread' as a general food category is uncountable and should be singular without article. Use 'bread' to express liking bread in general.

× I love the the sky and the color of the sky.

✓ I love the sky and its color.

Remove duplicated 'the' and avoid repetition by replacing 'the color of the sky' with the possessive 'its color' for conciseness and naturalness.

× In my opinion, I do prefer the sea because I find I find that it's more attractive.

✓ In my opinion, I prefer the sea because I find that it's more attractive.

'Do prefer' is unnecessarily emphatic; simple present 'prefer' is more natural. Also 'I find I find' duplicates; remove the repetition. Ensure single occurrence of verbs to maintain correct present tense usage.

× I love the the sea, especially when the sun hits the border.

✓ I love the sea, especially when the sun hits the horizon.

Remove duplicated 'the'. 'Hits the border' is incorrect collocation; the correct collocation for the line where sun seems to meet water is 'horizon'. Use appropriate noun collocations.

× I love taking pictures of the sea, especially when it's sunset time.

✓ I love taking pictures of the sea, especially at sunset.

'When it's sunset time' is wordy and slightly unnatural. Use the adverbial phrase 'at sunset' which is concise and idiomatic. The gerund 'taking' is correct.

× I love enjoying the warm colours.

✓ I enjoy the warm colors.

'Love enjoying' is redundant and awkward; choose 'enjoy' or 'love' alone. 'Enjoy the warm colors' is concise and grammatically correct. Also use American spelling 'colors' or keep 'colours' consistently; choose one variant.