Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 発音と文法の訂正に集中してください。まず、“his”は誤りで、“that”や“doing so”など正しい語を使う必要があります。文は冗長で不完全な部分があり、流暢さを妨げています。具体的な理由を一文で述べ、次に短い補足説明を1〜2文で加えるようにしてください。接続詞（because, so, and）を適切に使い、口語のフィラー（uh）を減らしましょう。

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because I find it hard to remember details of a place. For example, when I travel I take pictures to capture unique buildings and colors so I can look back later. This helps me recall the atmosphere more clearly.

제안: 回答を一つの明確なトピック文で始め、補足として理由や具体例を1〜2文で述べてください。現在形や過去形の使い分け（I was born / I grew up）を正しくし、繰り返しや言い間違いを避けましょう。接続詞（because, so）で文をつなぎ、文を最後まで完結させること。

예시: I prefer rural areas because I grew up in central Tokyo and often enjoy escaping to quieter places. For instance, when I visit the countryside I appreciate the open spaces and natural scenery, which feel very different from city life.

제안: 時制と文法の整合性を改善してください（例: use 'prefer' not 'preferred' for general preference）。比較をする際は“because”で理由を明確に述べ、具体的な比較点（materials, architecture）を簡潔に述べましょう。“lock”は誤りで“rock”や“stone”が適切です。語彙を正確に選び、文を最大5文以内でまとめてください。

예시: I prefer views in other countries, especially rural Europe, because the architecture and materials are very different from Japan. For example, many European houses are built with stone, which gives a rustic feel, while buildings in Tokyo often use wood or modern materials.

× Yes, I like his.

✓ Yes, I like this.

The student used the incorrect pronoun 'his' (a possessive pronoun referring to a person). The intended demonstrative pronoun is 'this' to refer to taking pictures or the idea just mentioned. Suggestion: use 'this' or 'that' when referring to things or ideas, not 'his'.

× When I take a picture of a new place, uh, I can't memor.

✓ When I take a picture of a new place, I can't remember it.

The verb 'memor' is not a word; the correct verb is 'remember'. Also the sentence lacked an object for 'remember'. Suggestion: use the verb 'remember' and include the object (for example 'it' or 'the scene').

× I can't memorize the picture with specific memory.

✓ I can't memorize the picture in detail.

The phrase 'with specific memory' is awkward and ungrammatical. Use 'in detail' or 'specifically' to modify how something is remembered. Suggestion: say 'remember the picture in detail' or 'remember specific details of the picture'.

× That's why I always take a picture.

✓ That's why I always take pictures.

Context indicates a habitual action of taking pictures in general, so the plural 'pictures' is more natural. Suggestion: use plural for general habitual actions ('take pictures').

× Also going to the travel and.

✓ Also I like traveling.

The fragment 'Also going to the travel and' is incomplete and ungrammatical. The student likely intended to express a preference for traveling. Suggestion: use a full clause such as 'Also, I like traveling' or 'I also enjoy traveling'.

× I prefer the rural area 'cause I was born in Tokyo and I've laid I I've grown up in Tokyo for 20, more than 20 years and now I live in London.

✓ I prefer rural areas because I was born and grew up in Tokyo for more than 20 years, and now I live in London.

Multiple issues: 'the rural area' should be plural 'rural areas' for a general preference; ''cause' should be 'because' in formal speech; 'I've laid I I've grown up' is incorrect and redundant — correct is 'I grew up' or 'I have grown up', but with the time expression 'for more than 20 years' simple past 'grew up' or present perfect 'have lived' can be used. Suggestion: simplify to 'I was born and grew up in Tokyo for more than 20 years.'

× So like since I was born, I've grown up like the in central area.

✓ Since I was born, I grew up in the central area.

The phrase 'I've grown up like the in central area' is ungrammatical. Use 'I grew up in the central area' or 'I have grown up in a central area' depending on emphasis. Suggestion: 'I grew up in the central area of the city.'

× So when I go to the.

✓ So when I go to the countryside, I feel relaxed.

The fragment 'So when I go to the.' is incomplete. Provide a complete clause that fits context; likely the student meant 'when I go to the countryside' or 'to rural areas'. Suggestion: complete the sentence to express the intended idea.

× I preferred other countries because especially rural Europe, it's there's a much difference between my new country, which is Japan and Europe country.

✓ I prefer other countries, especially rural Europe, because there is a big difference between my home country, Japan, and European countries.

Use present tense 'prefer' for general preference. 'It's there's' is redundant; use 'there is'. 'A much difference' is ungrammatical — use 'a big difference' or 'many differences'. 'My new country' is incorrect; use 'my home country' or 'my native country'. Also 'Europe country' should be 'European countries'. Suggestion: simplify and correct noun phrases and verb forms.

× Basically the building is made of the wood in Tokyo in Japan, but here it's mainly made of the stone or lock.

✓ Basically buildings in Tokyo, Japan, are made of wood, but here they are mainly made of stone or brick.

Issues: 'the building' suggests a specific building but general statement needs plural 'buildings'. 'Made of the wood' should be 'made of wood' (no article). 'In Tokyo in Japan' is redundant; 'Tokyo, Japan' suffices. 'It's mainly made of the stone or lock' incorrect: 'it's' vague, 'the stone' unnecessary article, and 'lock' is wrong word — likely 'brick'. Suggestion: use plural nouns for generalizations, omit unnecessary articles with materials, and use correct material name 'brick'.