Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail and a brief reason using a linking word. Avoid vague phrases like "creates a memory for our future."

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views, especially sunrises and sunsets. For example, I often capture the sunset at the riverbank because the warm colours and changing light make each photo unique.

제안: Improve grammar and clarity, and give a specific reason with linking words. Use plural/singular correctly and avoid repetition. Offer one concrete example to support your preference.

예시: I prefer urban areas because they offer more job opportunities and convenient facilities. For instance, cities have public transport and many shops, so it’s easier to access services and capture lively street scenes.

제안: Clarify whether you mean your own country or other countries, and correct pronoun and word choice. Give a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific examples of what you can learn, using linking words for coherence.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because they expose me to different cultures and lifestyles. For example, visiting Japan taught me about efficient public transportation and respect for public spaces, which I find inspiring.

× Yes, I like to take pictures of different views like sunset, sunrise because it creates a memory for our future.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views, like sunsets and sunrises, because they create memories for the future.

The verb 'like' is commonly followed by a gerund when talking about general preferences; use 'taking' instead of 'to take'. Also 'sunset, sunrise' should be pluralized to 'sunsets and sunrises' to match the general meaning (singular/plural issue). 'It creates a memory' is incorrect because the subject refers to multiple views; use 'they create memories'. Use commas to separate clauses for clarity.

× I prefer urban area because in urban area people got work easily and get all type of facilities easily from the rural area.

✓ I prefer urban areas because in urban areas people get work easily and have access to all types of facilities more easily than in rural areas.

Use plural 'urban areas' and 'rural areas' when speaking generally. 'Got' is past tense and incorrect here; use present 'get' for general statements (present tense). 'Get all type of facilities' is ungrammatical: use 'have access to all types of facilities'. Also add comparison 'more easily than in rural areas' to clarify contrast.

× I prefer the country because we learn a lot of things from their like their cultural reason and living style etcetera.

✓ I prefer other countries because we learn a lot from them, such as their culture and way of life.

Use present simple 'learn' for general truth (present tense). 'The country' is unclear; 'other countries' matches the question. 'Their' (possessive pronoun) was used where an object pronoun 'them' is needed (incorrect use of pronouns). Phrases like 'cultural reason' and 'living style' are incorrect collocations; use 'culture' and 'way of life'. Avoid 'etcetera' in concise speech. Adjust word order and word choice for natural English.