Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail with a brief reason. Avoid repetition and filler phrases. Also correct small grammar errors (e.g., 'remind' → 'reminds', remove 'oh it's').

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. For example, when I see a beautiful sunset, I grab my camera because the colors and light create memorable scenes that I like to keep.

제안: Give a clear direct answer and a specific reason, using linking words. Fix grammar (singular/plural, article use) and avoid unclear phrases like 'I land a mess.' Provide one concrete example of what you like about rural views.

예시: I prefer rural areas because of the natural landscapes and quieter atmosphere. For example, I like photographing rolling hills and small cottages, which feel more peaceful than busy city streets.

제안: Answer directly, use correct grammar (e.g., 'other countries', 'I prefer other countries because…'), and add a concise specific detail or personal example. Use linking words to connect reason and example.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy exploring different landscapes and cultures. For example, in Switzerland I photograph mountains and waterfalls because their dramatic scenery is very inspiring.

× Yes, I always like taking pictures of different views.

✓ Yes, I always like taking pictures of different views.

No grammatical change needed; sentence correctly uses present simple to express a habitual preference. Keep using 'always' with present simple for habits.

× For example, when I see a beautiful sunset or sunrise, I grab my camera and take a picture of it because every single picture remind me of a beautiful oh it's beautiful nature.

✓ For example, when I see a beautiful sunset or sunrise, I grab my camera and take a picture of it because every single picture reminds me of beautiful nature.

This sentence has a subject-verb agreement error: 'picture' (singular) as the subject for 'remind' requires the verb 'reminds' (third person singular). Also remove the filler 'oh it's' and unnecessary article 'a' before 'beautiful nature'. Improve fluency by using 'reminds me of beautiful nature.' Use consistent present simple tense for habitual actions.

× Well, I prefer rural area.

✓ Well, I prefer rural areas.

Countable noun 'area' needs plural 'areas' when speaking generally. Use plural to indicate a general preference between types of places.

× It's because of the landscape or building.

✓ It's because of the landscape and buildings.

Parallel nouns should agree in number and use a coordinating conjunction. 'Landscape or building' is awkward; use 'landscape and buildings' to indicate multiple factors in rural areas.

× And for example, I take the picture of a building, I land a mess.

✓ For example, when I take a picture of a building, I make a mess.

Original sentence is unclear and contains incorrect verb 'land' and punctuation. Likely intended meaning is that taking the picture creates a mess (or makes things messy). Use subordinate clause 'when I take a picture...' and correct verb 'make' in present simple. If the intended meaning was different, rephrase to be explicit (e.g., 'I end up making a mess').

× I prefer other country because I love exploring new countries and for example, when I go to Switzerland, I love to take photos of the mountain and the falls because of their natural and dramatic views.

✓ I prefer other countries because I love exploring new places and, for example, when I go to Switzerland, I love to take photos of the mountains and the waterfalls because of their natural and dramatic views.

Multiple issues: 'other country' should be plural 'other countries' to express general preference. 'Countries' is more natural with 'new'. Use 'places' or 'countries' consistently. 'The mountain and the falls' should be plural 'mountains and waterfalls' when speaking generally; include 'the' appropriately. Maintain present simple for habitual preference and actions. Also add a comma for clarity.