Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words, correct verb tense and pronoun use, and give one specific supporting detail with a linking word. Aim for 2–4 sentences under the five-sentence limit.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they help me remember special moments. For example, when I visit national parks I often photograph landscapes and wildlife, which lets me revisit those memories later.

제안: Provide a direct topic sentence and one clear reason with a linking word. Correct grammar (comparative phrases, verb agreement) and avoid vague phrasing like "peace in my heart." Use a concise supporting detail that explains how rural views affect you.

예시: I prefer rural views to urban ones because I love natural scenery. For example, the quiet fields and mountains help me relax and clear my mind after a busy week.

제안: Answer directly and fix grammar and pronoun errors. Use correct singular/plural forms and provide one specific reason with an example. Avoid incomplete sentences and repetition; finish your thought with a clear concluding sentence.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because Nepal has diverse landscapes, from mountains to valleys. For example, many tourists visit places like the Annapurna region, and I would like to explore more of Nepal's scenery myself.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because it recalled our memories after long times.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because they recall our memories even after a long time.

The original sentence uses 'recalled' (past tense) incorrectly with the present habit 'I like'. Use present simple 'recall' to show a general truth. Also 'pictures' is plural so use 'they', and 'after long times' should be 'after a long time' for natural phrasing.

× Also umm for example I take lots.

✓ For example, I take a lot of pictures.

The original is a fragment and lacks the object 'pictures'. 'Lots' should be 'a lot' and needs a noun following it. Rearranged to a complete sentence: subject + verb + object.

× I used to take lots of pictures when I visit natural places.

✓ I used to take lots of pictures when I visited natural places.

The phrase 'used to' indicates a past habit, so the time clause should use past tense 'visited', not present 'visit'.

× That's why I feel like very.

✓ That's why I feel very happy.

The original is incomplete and missing an adjective after 'feel'. 'Very' must modify an adjective, so add an appropriate adjective such as 'happy' to complete the thought.

× I much prefer beauty in rural areas because I love natural beauty of the earth.

✓ I much prefer the beauty of rural areas because I love the natural beauty of the earth.

Add definite article 'the' before 'beauty' and 'natural beauty' to refer to specific qualities. The original also repeats 'beauty' awkwardly; this correction keeps both but grammatically correct with articles.

× The beauty of rural areas give me the peace in my heart and in my mind also.

✓ The beauty of rural areas gives me peace in my heart and mind.

Subject 'The beauty' is singular, so verb should be 'gives' (third person singular). Removed unnecessary articles and 'also' for conciseness: 'peace in my heart and mind' is clearer.

× That's why.

✓ That's why I prefer rural areas.

The fragment 'That's why.' is incomplete. Add the reason's result to form a full sentence that connects to previous statements.

× I definitely prefer views in my own countries because you Nepal is rich in natural resources and its physical appearance.

✓ I definitely prefer views in my own country because Nepal is rich in natural resources and has beautiful landscapes.

Use singular 'country' not 'countries' when referring to the speaker's nation. Remove the extraneous 'you'. Replace 'its physical appearance' with a natural collocation 'has beautiful landscapes' to convey meaning clearly.

× That's why many peoples tourists come to visit Nepal.

✓ That's why many tourists come to visit Nepal.

'Peoples' is incorrect here; 'people' or 'tourists' is appropriate. 'Many tourists' is the correct plural noun phrase; 'peoples' refers to ethnic groups and is unnecessary.

× I also want to explore whole Nepal for.

✓ I also want to explore the whole of Nepal.

The original ends with a stray preposition 'for' and misses the article 'the' and preposition 'of' in 'the whole of Nepal'. The correction completes the sentence and uses natural English word order.