Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your response more natural and precise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct vocabulary and grammar, and add one or two specific details using a linking word. Avoid vague or incorrect words like “mysterical” (use “interesting” or “unusual”).

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photography helps me capture interesting scenes when I explore new places. For example, I like photographing coastal sunsets and unusual street scenes, which remind me of the places I’ve visited.

제안: Improve grammar and add a specific supporting detail with a linking word. Use plural or articles correctly (e.g., “peace and quiet” is fine but adjust the sentence structure) and give an example of what you like about rural views.

예시: I prefer rural areas because they offer peace and quiet, so I can relax and think clearly. For instance, I enjoy photographing open fields and small villages where there is less noise and more natural scenery.

제안: Be specific and avoid overgeneralizations. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give a clear reason and an example. Correct grammar (use plural forms and precise adjectives) and tighten the response to one or two supporting details.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy seeing different architecture and urban design that reflect other cultures. For example, I like photographing modern public spaces and efficient transport hubs abroad, which often look very different from those at home.

× Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views because I like when I explore things and when I take pictures of mysterical events.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because I enjoy exploring things and taking pictures of mysterious events.

The original sentence uses 'do like' which is unnecessary for a simple affirmative; use 'like'. 'When I explore' is awkward after 'I like'; use the gerund 'exploring' to show activities you enjoy (Verb + -ing form). 'Mysterical' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'mysterious'. Also combine parallel gerunds 'exploring' and 'taking' for clarity.

× I prefer rural areas because it is peace and quiet and I can relax my mind.

✓ I prefer rural areas because there is peace and quiet and I can relax my mind.

The phrase 'it is peace and quiet' is unidiomatic. Use the existential construction 'there is' to introduce 'peace and quiet' (Article/There-be issue). This fits the context of stating that such things exist in rural areas. Also 'relax my mind' is acceptable but 'clear my mind' is more natural.

× I prefer views in other countries because other countries are developed and they have different type of technologies which is more efficient for people.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because other countries are more developed and they have different types of technology that are more efficient for people.

Problems include 'different type of technologies' which mixes singular/plural forms; use 'different types of technology' or 'different types of technologies' consistently (Singular and plural issue). Also 'are developed' is better as 'more developed' to compare, and 'which is more efficient' should agree with plural 'types' so use 'that are more efficient' (subject-verb agreement and relative clause correction).