Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is natural and personal with good examples, but shorten and structure it more clearly. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two concise supporting details. Avoid filler phrases and reduce repetition (e.g., 'don't necessarily have to be'). Use a linking phrase when giving examples.

예시: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views. For example, I often photograph everyday scenes like a nicely arranged meal or a mocktail against an aesthetic background, because finding the right spot and moment makes ordinary subjects look special.

제안: Good content and clear preference, but avoid hesitation and split sentences. Combine ideas with linking words and add a specific example or reason to support your opinion. Reduce filler words like 'uh' and correct small grammar issues (e.g., 'lights up' instead of 'lights, uh, lights up').

예시: I prefer urban views because tall buildings and long highways create dramatic compositions, especially at sunset. For instance, I like photographing the skyline when the city lights come on, which adds color and contrast to my images.

제안: Your answer is clear and gives reasons, but improve vocabulary accuracy and sentence variety. Replace vague phrases ('which I connect with so much') with specific feelings or memories, fix word choice errors ('desert' not 'dessert'), and use a linking phrase to contrast your openness to travel.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because they feel familiar and meaningful—I have personal memories of many places. My country is diverse, with beaches, deserts and mountains, so I rarely run out of interesting scenes; however, I would still like to visit other countries to broaden my perspective.

× Yes, I absolutely love taking pictures of different views, but don't necessarily have to be beach or mountain.

✓ Yes, I absolutely love taking pictures of different views, but they don't necessarily have to be a beach or a mountain.

The original sentence omits the subject for the clause and lacks articles. This is an article error (ID 22) and a sentence structure issue. Use the subject 'they' to refer to 'different views' and add the indefinite article 'a' before singular countable nouns 'beach' and 'mountain'. Suggestion: include the subject and appropriate articles: 'they don't necessarily have to be a beach or a mountain.'

× It could be just a simple picture of your meal and a mocktail on a nice background clicked in an aesthetic way.

✓ It could be just a simple picture of your meal and a mocktail on a nice background, taken in an aesthetic way.

The main issue is the verb choice and phrasing rather than article, but it also reads awkwardly. Replace 'clicked' (informal/inappropriate verb) with 'taken' and add a comma before the participial phrase for clarity. This fits article/word-choice correction guidance (ID 22). Suggestion: use 'taken' for photographs and separate the clause with a comma.

× So it's all about finding the right spot and moment to get the best picture.

✓ So it's all about finding the right spot and the right moment to get the best picture.

The sentence is mostly correct but sounds smoother with parallel structure and repetition of 'right' before both nouns. This is a style improvement related to present participle usage (ID 10). Suggestion: keep parallel form: 'finding the right spot and the right moment.'

× Both are beautiful in their own unique ways, but I personally prefer taking pictures in urban areas because there are tall buildings with a long highway.

✓ Both are beautiful in their own unique ways, but I personally prefer taking pictures in urban areas because there are tall buildings and long highways.

The original used singular 'a long highway' with plural context 'buildings'; use plural 'long highways' or rephrase. This is a quantifier/number agreement issue (ID 14). Suggestion: match plurality: 'tall buildings and long highways.'

× Especially when the sun sets and the building lights, uh, lights up the whole city.

✓ Especially when the sun sets and the building lights up the whole city.

The original repeats 'lights' unnecessarily and misplaces subject-verb agreement. Use singular verb 'lights up' to agree with singular subject 'building' (ID 2). Suggestion: remove the extra 'lights' so the clause reads 'the building lights up the whole city.' Alternatively, use plural subject: 'the buildings light up the whole city.'

× I personally prefer views in my own country because they are familiar.

✓ I personally prefer views in my own country because they are familiar to me.

The sentence is understandable but sounds more natural with 'to me' after 'familiar.' This is an article/phrase usage refinement (ID 22). Suggestion: add 'to me' for clarity: 'familiar to me.'

× I have been to many places which I connect with so much and since my country is diverse, it has beach, dessert and mountains which makes it even more meaningful.

✓ I have been to many places with which I feel a strong connection, and since my country is diverse, it has beaches, deserts, and mountains, which makes it even more meaningful.

Multiple issues: 'which I connect with so much' is awkward—use 'with which I feel a strong connection' (relative clause form). Also singular nouns 'beach, dessert and mountains' should be plural and 'dessert' is incorrect for 'desert'. This covers verb form and plural/article errors (IDs 9 and 1). Suggestion: use plural nouns for multiple features ('beaches, deserts, and mountains') and clearer relative clause 'places with which I feel a strong connection.'

× But I would love to visit foreign countries to broaden my perspective.

✓ But I would love to visit foreign countries to broaden my perspective.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No correction needed. Suggestion: none.