Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details, and avoid filler words like 'uh' and repetition. Use linking words (for example, also, because) to connect ideas and be careful with grammar (plural/singular and verb tense).

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views, especially buildings and architectural details. For example, I often shoot both outdoors and indoors because lighting can dramatically change the mood of a scene, so I experiment with natural light and artificial light to create varied effects.

제안: Begin with a direct answer, then give a specific reason and a brief example. Use a linking word to connect the opinion and reason, and vary vocabulary (e.g., 'spacious' → 'open' or 'tranquil'). Avoid repeating the same word 'areas'.

예시: I prefer rural views because I enjoy being surrounded by nature and open spaces. For instance, I like wide fields and quiet paths where I can relax and take photos without the noise and crowd of the city.

제안: Give a clear direct answer, then explain with specific comparisons and examples. Remove filler words and correct grammar (e.g., 'I'm Korean' and 'more uniform' instead of 'generalized'). Use linking words such as 'because' and 'whereas' to contrast. Provide one concrete example of what you find interesting in Europe.

예시: I prefer views in Europe because the architecture is more varied and often historic. For example, I enjoy the mix of medieval churches, colourful townhouses and ornate facades in cities like Prague, which contrasts with the more uniform modern buildings I often see in Korea.

× I like taking picture of buildings and architecture.

✓ I like taking pictures of buildings and architecture.

The noun 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' because it refers to multiple instances of photos in general. Use plural when speaking about more than one item or a general activity involving many items. Suggestion: Use 'pictures' when referring to photos in general.

× Uh, so I took picture outdoor and indoor and sometimes by the lights it looks different to the picture.

✓ Uh, so I took pictures outdoors and indoors, and sometimes the lights make the picture look different.

Several issues: 'took picture' needs plural 'pictures' (singular/plural). 'Outdoor' and 'indoor' used as adverbs should be 'outdoors' and 'indoors'. The phrase 'by the lights it looks different to the picture' is ungrammatical; use 'the lights make the picture look different' to show causation. Suggestion: Use correct plural and adverb forms and a clearer clause showing cause and effect.

× I prefer rural areas because I like the nature and usually in rural areas it's more spacious than urban areas, so I like that.

✓ I prefer rural areas because I like nature, and usually rural areas are more spacious than urban areas, so I like that.

'The nature' is incorrect in this context; 'nature' as a general concept usually omits the article. 'It's more spacious' is acceptable conversationally but 'rural areas are more spacious' matches plural subject agreement. Suggestion: Drop 'the' before 'nature' and ensure subject-verb agreement with plural 'rural areas are'.

× I prefer views of Europe. Uh, I'm a Korean or in Korea it's more like. Like generalized buildings are more in Korea, beside in Europe they have many various buildings.

✓ I prefer views in Europe. I'm Korean; in Korea buildings are more similar, but in Europe there are many different kinds of buildings.

Multiple problems: 'views of Europe' is acceptable but 'views in Europe' is clearer. 'I'm a Korean or in Korea it's more like' is ungrammatical and unclear; better to say 'I'm Korean; in Korea...' 'generalized buildings are more in Korea' uses incorrect adjective and word order—use 'buildings are more similar' or 'there are more uniform buildings'. 'beside' should be 'but' and 'many various buildings' is redundant—use 'many different kinds of buildings' or 'a wide variety of buildings'. Suggestion: Use clear pronoun/noun phrases, correct conjunctions, and avoid redundant modifiers.