Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce repetition, correct grammar and make the response more concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repeating words (e.g., “because because”) and fix collocations (e.g., “specialy” → “especially”).

예시: Yes, I love taking photographs of different views. I have done it for many years because it helps me preserve memories and capture moments I can revisit later. For example, I often photograph sunsets and street scenes because they remind me of places I’ve visited.

제안: Clarify and correct grammar, use precise vocabulary and avoid irrelevant or confusing details. Provide one focused reason and a short example. Fix phrases like “it's illuminated buildings” → “its illuminated buildings,” and “scenic sports” → likely “scenic spots.”

예시: I prefer urban areas because I love photographing city skylines and illuminated buildings at night. For example, when I go out with friends we often shoot rooftop views and busy streets to capture the city atmosphere.

제안: Organize the answer with a clear topic sentence and two contrasting reasons using linking words (e.g., “on the one hand… on the other hand…”). Correct small grammatical issues (e.g., “different country” → “different countries,” “want to capture” → “would like to capture”).

예시: I like views in both my country and abroad. On the one hand, I enjoy photographing familiar landscapes at home because I know the best viewpoints; on the other hand, I would like to visit other countries to capture different cultures, traditions and unique architecture.

× Yes, I do love taking photographs of different views.

✓ Yes, I love taking photographs of different views.

Using 'do' in 'I do love' is unnecessary for a simple affirmative present-tense statement. Remove the auxiliary 'do' to use the correct present simple form. Suggestion: use 'I love' for a natural affirmative sentence.

× I have been doing it for many years because because I enjoy preserving memories and capturing the movement so when I look back I can have lots of memory to look up to.

✓ I have been doing it for many years because I enjoy preserving memories and capturing moments, so when I look back I will have many memories to look back on.

Errors: repeated word 'because because', incorrect noun 'movement' (should be 'moments'), awkward clause 'lots of memory to look up to' (should be 'many memories to look back on'), and tense/sequence clarity. Use present perfect continuous 'have been doing' is fine; keep 'because I enjoy' in present simple; use 'will have' or 'can have' consistently. Suggestions: remove duplicate word, replace 'movement' with 'moments', use 'many memories' and the idiom 'look back on'.

× Specially I enjoy taking photos.

✓ Especially, I enjoy taking photos.

Spelling error: 'Specially' vs 'Especially'. Use 'Especially' to emphasize; add a comma after the introductory adverb. Suggestion: write 'Especially, I enjoy...' or 'I especially enjoy...'.

× I prefer urban areas because I enjoy the city skyline and it's illuminated buildings at night.

✓ I prefer urban areas because I enjoy the city skyline and its illuminated buildings at night.

Confusion between the contraction 'it's' (it is) and the possessive pronoun 'its'. Use 'its' to show possession ('its illuminated buildings'). Suggestion: use 'its' for possessive forms.

× I have lived in city for a long time so I enjoy capturing for images when I go out with my friends to scenic sports like caves, restaurants.

✓ I have lived in the city for a long time, so I enjoy taking photos when I go out with my friends to scenic spots like caves and restaurants.

Multiple issues: missing article 'the' before 'city'; incorrect preposition 'capturing for images' should be 'taking photos' or 'capturing images'; word 'sports' is wrong; should be 'spots'; missing comma before 'so' for clarity and 'and' to join nouns. Suggestions: use 'the city', use 'taking photos' or 'capturing images', replace 'sports' with 'spots', and list items with 'and'.

× I prefer both as I've been living in my country, I have been to many places and I did enjoy it a lot.

✓ I prefer both. I have been living in my country and have been to many places, and I enjoyed them a lot.

Run-on sentence and tense mismatch: 'I've been living' (present perfect continuous) and 'I did enjoy' (past simple) are inconsistent; 'did enjoy' is unnecessary emphatic past. Use 'I enjoyed them a lot' or keep present perfect 'I have enjoyed them a lot'. Also separate into clearer sentences. Suggestion: maintain consistent tense and plural reference ('them').

× But I would love to go to different country and want to capture different culture, tradition and uniqueness.

✓ But I would love to go to different countries and capture different cultures, traditions, and unique aspects.

Errors: missing plural forms 'country' -> 'countries', 'culture' and 'tradition' should be plural when generalizing; redundancy 'want to capture' after 'would love to' can be simplified to 'and capture'; parallel list requires commas and plural nouns. Suggestion: use plurals and parallel structure: 'go to different countries and capture different cultures, traditions, and unique aspects.'