Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and grammar errors (use correct tense and articles). For example, say you enjoy variety and mention a specific type of scene you like photographing. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' correctly.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because variety keeps photography interesting. For example, I like capturing coastal sunsets as well as city skylines, which lets me practice different techniques and keeps me inspired.

제안: Give a clear direct answer, then support it with specific details and correct vocabulary. Avoid repetition and vague phrases. Use one linking phrase (e.g., 'because' or 'for example') and provide a concrete image or activity to illustrate your point.

예시: I prefer photographing rural areas because they offer natural landscapes and peaceful settings. For example, I enjoy shooting mountain ranges at sunrise, when mist and light create dramatic effects.

제안: Answer directly and give specific, well-structured reasons using linking words. Correct repetition and choose precise vocabulary (e.g., 'four seasons', 'cherry blossoms', 'snow sports'). Mention one or two clear examples and avoid casual fillers like 'you know'.

예시: I prefer photographing in my own country because we have four distinct seasons, which offer varied scenery throughout the year. For example, in spring I photograph cherry blossoms, and in winter I capture snowy landscapes where people enjoy snowboarding.

× I like it because sometimes I take a picture Same I take same picture it's boring and I wanna take picture different places in different places.

✓ I like it because sometimes I take the same picture, and it's boring, so I want to take pictures in different places.

Errors: incorrect repetition and missing articles; 'same' should be used with 'the' and 'picture' should be plural when speaking generally. Colloquial 'wanna' is informal; use 'want to'. Use commas and conjunctions to join clauses. Suggestion: use 'the same picture' and 'take pictures in different places'.

× Also beauty scenes scene beauty view.

✓ Also, I like beautiful scenes and views.

Original is ungrammatical word order and wrong word forms. 'Beauty' is a noun; use adjective 'beautiful' to modify 'scenes' and 'views'. Add a subject 'I like' to make a complete sentence.

× I prefer to take picture in rural area because it is it has beautiful view and a lot of nature.

✓ I prefer to take pictures in rural areas because they have beautiful views and a lot of nature.

Errors: missing plural and articles. Use plural 'pictures' and 'rural areas' or 'the rural area'; 'it has' is unclear — use 'they have' to refer to areas. 'Beautiful views' needs plural. Also use 'in' + plural place form.

× For example, there is Mountain Mountain.

✓ For example, there are mountains.

Original repeats word and uses singular with 'there is' incorrectly when referring generally to mountains. Use plural 'mountains' with 'there are' for general examples. Also avoid repetition.

× I prefer to take picture in my country because there are Four Seasons, so I I enjoy taking picture each season.

✓ I prefer to take pictures in my country because we have four seasons, so I enjoy taking pictures in each season.

Errors: 'take picture' should be 'take pictures' (plural). 'There are Four Seasons' is unnatural; use 'we have four seasons' or 'my country has four seasons'. Remove duplicate 'I'. Use 'in each season' for clarity.

× For example, in the spring there's a cherry blossom, you know, winter there's snow and snowball and people can play snowboard.

✓ For example, in spring there are cherry blossoms; in winter there is snow and people can go snowboarding.

Errors: tense and count nouns. 'Cherry blossom' as a general phenomenon should be plural 'cherry blossoms'. 'Snowball' is incorrect in this context; likely meant 'snow' or 'snowballs' but better to say 'snow' and 'go snowboarding' rather than 'play snowboard'. Use parallel structure 'in spring...; in winter...' and correct verb 'go snowboarding'.