Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện độ tự nhiên và mạch lạc: Tránh lặp từ (ví dụ: “yes” hai lần) và dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, ngắn gọn. Thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể (khi nào, loại khung cảnh yêu thích) và kết hợp liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc nhưng không quá dài (tối đa 3–4 câu). Chú ý ngữ pháp: “the photography” nên là “photography” hoặc “taking photos”; “hang around with my friend” nên là “hang out with my friends.”

예시: Yes, I do. I’m really into photography and often take photos when I hang out with my friends. For example, we usually shoot cityscapes at sunset because the light is very flattering.

제안: Cải thiện ngữ pháp, tính chính xác và cụ thể: Dùng cấu trúc đúng như “In my opinion” hoặc “I prefer urban areas.” Tránh thì sai (dùng “was” -> “is”) và bổ sung lý do cụ thể (ví dụ: kiến trúc, ánh sáng, hoạt động). Sử dụng nối từ để giải thích lý do rõ ràng và ngắn gọn trong 2–3 câu.

예시: I prefer urban areas. I find the architecture and street life very photogenic, and there are always interesting scenes to capture, such as colorful markets or modern buildings.

제안: Cải thiện sự mạch lạc, ngữ pháp và cụ thể hóa nội dung: Tránh tiếng lặp và tiếng ngập ngừng (“well, well”, “uh”). Dùng thì đúng (dùng “is” thay vì “was”) và trả lời trực tiếp: “I prefer my own country because...”, sau đó nêu ví dụ cụ thể về địa điểm hoặc loại cảnh. Giữ câu ngắn gọn (2–3 câu) và tránh từ không cần thiết.

예시: I prefer taking photos in my own country because it has many beautiful, unexplored destinations. For instance, I enjoy photographing historic temples and coastal villages that showcase local culture and scenery.

× Yes, definitely, yes. So I'm a big fan of the photography, so I always take a picture when I hang around with my friend.

✓ Yes, definitely. I'm a big fan of photography, so I always take pictures when I hang around with my friends.

'The photography' is incorrect because 'photography' as a general hobby does not need the definite article; use 'photography'. 'Take a picture' should be plural 'take pictures' to match the habitual action. 'My friend' implies one friend; use 'my friends' if speaking generally about hanging out with friends. Suggestions: remove 'the' before uncountable nouns used generally, use plural nouns for repeated actions, and keep sentences concise. Grammar problem type ID:22

× From my opinion, I think urban area was the perfect choice for me.

✓ In my opinion, I think urban areas are the perfect choice for me.

The correct preposition is 'in' for 'in my opinion'. 'Urban area' should be plural 'urban areas' when speaking generally, and verb agreement requires 'are' not 'was' for present general preference. Also 'the perfect choice' is acceptable but with plural subject use 'are a perfect choice' or 'is the perfect choice' with singular. Suggestions: use 'in my opinion', match plural nouns and present-tense verbs for general statements. Grammar problem type ID:11

× So it has so many beautiful views that I can take a picture.

✓ It has so many beautiful views that I can take pictures.

The sentence used present 'has' which is fine for current states; main error was 'take a picture' which should be plural 'take pictures' for repeated opportunities. No past tense needed. Suggestion: keep present tense for general facts and use plural when referring to multiple items. Grammar problem type ID:5

× Well, well, actually I think my country was so many beautiful destination that I cannot explore.

✓ Well, actually I think my country has so many beautiful destinations that I cannot explore them all.

'Was' is incorrect here; use 'has' to indicate possession. 'So many beautiful destination' needs plural 'destinations'. Also add 'them all' or 'them' to reference the destinations. Suggestion: use present tense 'has' for ongoing situations and plural form for countable nouns; include object pronoun for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:11

× So I think it was a great choice for me to take a picture all of the, uh, famous places in my country.

✓ So I think it is a great idea for me to take pictures of all the famous places in my country.

Use present 'is' for current intention rather than past 'was'. 'Take a picture all of the famous places' is ungrammatical — use 'take pictures of all the famous places'. Remove unnecessary filler and use 'idea' or 'choice' appropriately. Suggestion: use present tense for current plans, pluralize 'pictures' and use 'of' after 'take pictures'. Grammar problem type ID:6