Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, sentence structure and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., 'Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views.'), avoid redundancy, and correct noun/verb forms and articles. Add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example: 'because' or 'so') and keep the answer within 2–3 sentences. Also avoid vague claims like 'I really attract many peoples'—instead give a concrete detail or omit it.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, I often photograph city skylines and coastal sunsets because I like capturing contrasts in light, and I usually share my best shots on Instagram and Snapchat.

제안: Begin with a clear preference and give specific reasons using linking words. Correct vocabulary (e.g., 'prefer', 'urban', 'rural', 'villages') and avoid unclear or incorrect statements about people ('people attack too much' and 'people only thinks himself'). If you mean social interactions, explain positively or neutrally. Keep to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like 'because' or 'however'.

예시: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the variety of architecture and lively street scenes. However, I also like rural views for their peaceful landscapes and natural beauty.

제안: Answer directly and clearly. Start with a topic sentence stating your preference (own country or other countries). Use correct grammar and avoid repeated words. If you haven't traveled abroad, state that and give a reason or a hope for the future. Use linking words such as 'because' or 'however' and include one specific detail.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because India has very diverse landscapes, from mountains to beaches. I haven't visited many other countries yet, but I would like to travel abroad in the future to see different architectural styles.

× Yes, I like taking picture for different views and I share on Instagram and Snapchat that I really attract many peoples towards it.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views, and I share them on Instagram and Snapchat because they attract many people.

The student used singular 'picture' instead of plural 'pictures' and used 'peoples' which is incorrect; the correct plural is 'people'. Also prepositions and pronouns needed adjustment: 'taking pictures of' and 'share them on'. Use 'because they attract many people' to express reason clearly.

× Yes, I like taking picture for different views and I share on Instagram and Snapchat that I really attract many peoples towards it.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views, and I share them on Instagram and Snapchat because they attract many people.

Use 'pictures of' rather than 'picture for'. When talking about posting, say 'share them on Instagram and Snapchat'. 'Towards it' is unnecessary and unidiomatic; use a clause like 'because they attract many people'.

× Yes, I like taking picture for different views and I share on Instagram and Snapchat that I really attract many peoples towards it.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views, and I share them on Instagram and Snapchat because they attract many people.

The original used 'it' to refer to multiple pictures; replace with the plural pronoun 'them'. Also 'I really attract many people' incorrectly assigns agency to the speaker; better to say 'they attract many people' meaning the pictures draw attention.

× Urban areas like cities and something else. Rural areas are where we call the villages in.

✓ Urban areas are cities and other towns. Rural areas are what we call villages.

'Something else' is vague; use 'other towns' or similar. 'Villages in' is incorrect word order; say 'what we call villages' or 'which are villages'. Ensure plurality matches: 'villages' plural.

× In rural areas there are people attacks too much with each other and urban areas the people only thinks himself.

✓ In rural areas people argue with each other a lot, while in urban areas people tend to think only about themselves.

Original sentence has incorrect verb forms and word order. Use 'people argue with each other' for mutual action, 'a lot' for frequency/intensity. 'People only thinks himself' has subject-verb agreement and pronoun errors; use 'people tend to think only about themselves'.

× In rural areas there are people attacks too much with each other and urban areas the people only thinks himself.

✓ In rural areas people argue with each other a lot, while in urban areas people tend to think only about themselves.

'People attacks' is incorrect because 'people' (plural) requires plural verb 'attack' but the intended meaning is 'argue' or 'fight'. 'People ... thinks' is wrong: 'people' requires 'think'. Also reflexive pronoun 'himself' is wrong for plural; use 'themselves'.

× Our country is very beautiful country, Our country is India and other country and don't don't I am not visit other country people and I don't take any knowledge for other country.

✓ My country is very beautiful. Our country is India, and I have not visited other countries, so I do not know much about them.

Several article and article-use errors: say 'My country is a very beautiful country' or simply 'My country is very beautiful.' 'Other country' should be plural 'other countries'. 'I am not visit' is ungrammatical; use present perfect 'I have not visited'. 'I don't take any knowledge for other country' is incorrect; express lack of knowledge as 'I do not know much about them'.

× Our country is very beautiful country, Our country is India and other country and don't don't I am not visit other country people and I don't take any knowledge for other country.

✓ My country is very beautiful. Our country is India, and I have not visited other countries, so I do not know much about them.

To talk about visits up to now, use the present perfect 'have not visited' rather than 'am not visit'. This tense correctly links past actions (visits) with the present.

× Our country is very beautiful country, Our country is India and other country and don't don't I am not visit other country people and I don't take any knowledge for other country.

✓ My country is very beautiful. Our country is India, and I have not visited other countries, so I do not know much about them.

Replace awkward phrasing 'other country people' with 'other countries' and refer back with 'them'. Avoid repeating words like 'don't don't' and use clear pronouns to refer to countries.