Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Risposta generalmente chiara ma con problemi grammaticali, uso impreciso dei tempi e frasi un po' ripetitive. Migliora la naturalezza usando frasi più concise (massimo 4-5 frasi), correggi la struttura grammaticale (ad esempio 'take' → 'taking', 'the children that are enjoying' → 'children enjoying'), e spiega brevemente cosa intendi per 'contrast' con un esempio concreto. Usa una congiunzione per collegare le idee (for example, however, because).

예시: I enjoy taking photos of different views, especially at the seaside. For example, I often photograph children playing with a ball because their movement creates lively scenes. However, I also like shots that show contrast, such as a calm horizon against busy beach activity.

제안: La risposta ha idee buone ma è disorganizzata e incompleta, con esitazioni e una frase finale tronca. Per migliorare, dai una frase tematica chiara, seguita da due dettagli specifici che spiegano perché preferisci le aree urbane (es. architettura, vita quotidiana). Evita esitazioni e chiudi con una frase di conclusione. Mantieni massimo 4 frasi coese usando connettori come 'because' e 'for example'.

예시: I prefer urban views to rural ones because I grew up in the city and its scenes feel familiar to me. For example, I enjoy photographing historic buildings and busy streets that show daily life. This connection to the city makes urban panoramas more meaningful for me.

제안: Buona idea ma frase grammaticale scorretta e lessico impreciso ('Despite I would like to going out'). Riformula con una frase principale chiara che esprima la preferenza e aggiungi una ragione specifica (es. varietà di paesaggi in Italia). Evita frasi vaghe come 'prefer the panorama' e usa vocaboli più precisi come 'diverse landscapes' o 'scenery'. Usa collegamenti: 'although', 'because', 'therefore'.

예시: Although I enjoy visiting other countries to take photos, I prefer the scenery in my own country. Italy offers a wide range of landscapes, from coastal beaches to mountains and historic towns, so I can find varied subjects close to home.

× I really enjoy taking pictures of different views.

✓ I really enjoy taking pictures of different views.

No correction needed. The verb 'enjoy' correctly takes the -ing form ('taking'). Keep as is.

× For example, I like going to the sea and take a picture of the seaside and the children that are enjoying themselves by playing with the ball.

✓ For example, I like going to the sea and taking pictures of the seaside and of children enjoying themselves playing with a ball.

The verb 'like' should be followed by the -ing form ('taking') when describing general preferences. Also use plural 'pictures' for generality, remove unnecessary 'that are', use 'playing with a ball' -> 'playing with a ball' or 'playing a ball' depending on context: 'playing with a ball' is correct. Use 'of children' rather than 'the children' for general scenes.

× But on the other hand, I also like the contrast between this image.

✓ But on the other hand, I also like the contrast in some images.

The phrase 'between this image' is unclear; 'between' requires two items to compare. Use 'contrast in some images' or 'contrast between elements in an image'. Adjusts noun choice for natural phrasing.

× I think I prefer the scenery over urban areas rather than rural because umm it is the place where I lived all my life, so it is a part of myself.

✓ I think I prefer scenery in urban areas rather than rural ones because it is the place where I have lived all my life, so it is part of who I am.

Use 'scenery in urban areas' (preposition use) and 'rural ones' for comparison. 'I lived' refers to past; the present perfect 'I have lived' is appropriate for life-to-date experience. 'a part of myself' is better expressed as 'part of who I am'.

× I think that looking at the panorama like.

✓ I think that looking at a panorama is calming.

The original is incomplete and lacks a main verb/complement. Provide a full clause: 'looking at a panorama is calming' or complete the thought with appropriate adjective or clause.

× Despite I would like to going out and visiting new place to taking out photo of different views, I think that my country that is Italy has several different landscapes that are amazing.

✓ Although I would like to go out and visit new places and take photos of different views, I think that my country, Italy, has several amazing landscapes.

'Despite' needs a noun phrase; use 'Although' or 'Despite the fact that'. Verbs after 'would like to' must be base forms: 'go', 'visit', 'take'. Use plural 'places' and 'photos'. Insert commas around 'Italy' and simplify 'that are amazing' to 'amazing'.

× So at the end I prefer the panorama.

✓ So in the end I prefer the scenery.

Use 'in the end' rather than 'at the end' for conclusions. 'The panorama' is awkward; 'scenery' or 'panoramas' fits better. Ensure noun choice matches general preference.