Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cevap daha açık ve doğal olmalı; cümle yapıları ve kelime seçimi düzeltilmeli. Konuya doğrudan cevap verin, ardından 1–2 destekleyici cümle ekleyin. Bağlaçlar kullanarak akışı iyileştirin (for example, because, so). ‘Different ways/waves’ yerine uygun kelimeler kullanın (different angles, perspectives, locations). Max 3–4 kısa cümleyle ifade edin.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because different angles can create more interesting images. For example, shooting from a low angle can make buildings look taller, while a wide shot captures the whole scene. This variety helps me take cooler and more memorable photos.

제안: Cümleleri daha düzenli ve doğal kurun; gereksiz tekrarları çıkarın. Doğrudan tercih belirtip, nedenini bir ya iki destekleyici nedenle açıklayın. ‘Human made buildings’ yerine 'man-made buildings' veya 'architecture' kullanın. Bağlaçlarla sebepleri bağlayın (because, and, also). Gereksiz dolgu seslerini (uh) çıkarın.

예시: I prefer urban areas because the architecture and cityscapes provide interesting backgrounds. For instance, modern buildings and colorful streets can add character to photos, and the variety of structures makes each picture unique.

제안: Cevabınızda ifade bozuklukları ve anlamsal belirsizlikler var; daha kibar ve mantıklı bir gerekçe verin. ‘I'm a national guy’ yerine ‘I prefer staying close to home’ gibi doğal ifadeler kullanın. Destekleyici detaylarda spesifik örnekler verin (örneğin belirli yerler, manzaralar). 2–3 kısa cümle yeterli ve tutarlı olsun.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because there are many beautiful places I know well and can visit easily. For example, we have scenic coastlines and historic towns that make great photo opportunities. I also enjoy showing visitors the landscapes I’m familiar with.

× Yes I do, because taking pictures from different ways can. Provide you to have cool photos because different waves would be great taking pictures from different.

✓ Yes, I do because taking pictures from different places can provide you with cool photos; different views are great for photography.

The original contains fragments and incorrect use of 'can.' 'Provide' must be part of the same clause as 'can' (modal + base verb) and 'to have' is unnecessary. 'Ways' and 'waves' are incorrect word choices; 'places' and 'views' are appropriate. Also combine fragments into a complete sentence. Suggestion: use 'can provide you with' or 'can give you' and replace 'ways/waves' with 'places/views'. Grammar problem type ID:10

× I prefer urban areas because uh, in urban areas you can take different human made buildings to your background.

✓ I prefer urban areas because, in cities, you can have different man-made buildings in the background of your photos.

The phrase 'take ... to your background' is incorrect. Use 'in the background' to indicate placement. 'Human made' should be 'man-made' or 'human-made.' Also 'urban areas' repeated is redundant; 'cities' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'in the background of your photos' or 'with ... in the background.' Grammar problem type ID:11

× With that they would look great in your picture and your picture can have a different.

✓ This makes the photos look great and gives your pictures variety.

Original is awkward and incomplete ('can have a different' is fragmentary). Rephrase to a complete clause: 'gives your pictures variety' or 'adds variety to your photos.' Avoid vague pronouns like 'that' without clear reference. Combine into one clear sentence. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I prefer views in my own country because I'm a national guy and in my country there are many places to and there are many great ways to take pictures or selfie.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because I'm patriotic, and there are many places and great spots for taking pictures or selfies.

'National guy' is unnatural; 'patriotic' or 'from my country' is better. 'Places to' is incomplete; add the verb or noun ('places to visit' or 'places'). 'Selfie' should be plural 'selfies' or 'taking selfies.' Also 'ways to take pictures' is better expressed as 'spots for taking pictures.' Grammar problem type ID:12

× Why would I prefer another country when there is my own country's nature business?

✓ Why would I prefer another country when my own country has such beautiful nature and scenery?

'Nature business' is incorrect collocation; use 'nature,' 'scenery,' or 'natural attractions.' Rephrase for natural English: 'my own country has beautiful nature' or 'beautiful natural scenery.' This corrects word choice and adjective use. Grammar problem type ID:13