Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce hesitation/errors and make sentences more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid singular/plural mistakes and unnecessary repetition.

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing different scenes. For example, when I visit another city I often take pictures of iconic landmarks and street scenes so I can remember the trip and share my best shots with friends.

제안: Provide slightly more specific and vivid details and use a linking word to connect ideas. Replace vague phrase 'white skies' with a clearer description and keep answer within 3–4 sentences.

예시: I prefer rural views because the countryside helps me relax. For instance, I love wide open fields and clear blue skies, which feel calming after a busy week. Also, the quiet atmosphere makes it easier to enjoy nature.

제안: Eliminate fillers (mm, umm, uh) and give a direct topic sentence. Add one specific reason and a linking word to improve coherence; correct grammar and plural forms (photos).

예시: I prefer views in my own country because I appreciate the familiar landscapes and cultural sites. For example, our coastal cliffs and historic towns offer scenery I know well, whereas when I visit other cities I still take many photos to explore new perspectives.

× I enjoy taking picture of different fields.

✓ I enjoy taking pictures of different fields.

The noun 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' because 'taking' indicates a habitual activity involving multiple instances; the plural matches 'different fields'. Use plural with countable nouns when referring to more than one item. Suggestion: Use 'pictures' whenever you mean more than one photo.

× share the best shots with my friend.

✓ share the best shots with my friends.

The speaker likely means sharing with more than one person or with people in general; 'my friend' is singular and may not match 'the best shots' (plural). If only one friend is meant, it's grammatically acceptable, but context suggests 'friends'. Clarify intended number: use 'my friend' for one person or 'my friends' for more than one.

× I prefer views in rural areas because the countryside makes me feel relaxed.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because the countryside makes me feel relaxed.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no article change needed. Keep 'the countryside' as it refers to the countryside in general.

× I especially enjoy looking at open fields and the white skies when I want to unwind.

✓ I especially enjoy looking at open fields and the white sky when I want to unwind.

'Skies' plural is possible, but 'white sky' is more natural when referring to the general appearance of the sky in that setting. If you mean multiple different skies in various places or times, 'skies' is acceptable. Suggestion: choose 'sky' for a general scene, 'skies' for varied instances.

× I prefer views in my country because there are a lot of beautiful views in our country.

✓ I prefer views in my country because there are a lot of beautiful views there.

Repeating 'in my country' and 'in our country' is redundant and inconsistent pronoun use. Replace the second phrase with 'there' to avoid repetition and maintain clarity. Suggestion: avoid repeating the same noun phrase; use 'there' or 'in my country' once.

× when I travel to uh, other city, uh, I often take a lot of photo.

✓ when I travel to another city, I often take a lot of photos.

Two errors: article and singular/plural. 'Other city' needs the determiner 'another' for a single city; 'photo' should be plural 'photos' after 'a lot of'. Use 'a lot of photos' to indicate many photos. Also remove filler words 'uh' in formal responses.