Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise, avoid repetition and correct basic grammar (e.g. verb forms, articles). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Use varied but accurate vocabulary (e.g. “photos” instead of repeating “taking pictures”).

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different scenes; photography is one of my hobbies. For example, when I travel I often photograph landscapes and candid shots of people and pets because they capture memorable moments.

제안: Good clear opinion and reasons. Improve by using more precise vocabulary and linking words for coherence, and avoid vague phrases like “and so on.” Provide one concrete example to make it more specific.

예시: I prefer rural views because cities are often crowded with buildings, which limit scenic beauty. For instance, in the countryside I enjoy wide fields, clear blue skies and rolling hills, which feel more peaceful and photogenic.

제안: Avoid repeating the same idea twice. Give a concise direct answer first, then support it with a specific reason or a short example. Use linking phrases like 'however' to contrast ideas and tidy up grammar (e.g. 'I have lived here').

예시: Although many countries have beautiful scenery, I prefer the views of my hometown. For example, having lived there for many years, I feel a strong attachment to its rivers and tree-lined streets, which remind me of childhood.

× Yes I like taking pictures and we can and I can also say taking pictures is one of my hobbies and when I go outside I like to taking pictures to some views or some people or even some dogs and cats.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures, and I can also say that taking pictures is one of my hobbies. When I go outside, I like to take pictures of some views, some people, or even dogs and cats.

Several errors: 'like to taking' is incorrect because after 'like to' the base verb form 'take' should be used (Verb + -ing form issue). Also missing conjunctions and articles for clarity. Suggestion: use 'like to take' or 'like taking' consistently, add 'that' after 'say' for clarity, and use 'of' to indicate what is photographed.

× They are very cute and I I think picture can set memories.

✓ They are very cute, and I think pictures can capture memories.

Problems: missing plural agreement and wrong verb choice. 'I I' is repetition. 'Picture' should be plural 'pictures' to match general meaning (Singular and plural issue, but focus here on preposition/word choice). 'Set memories' is incorrect collocation; native speakers say 'capture memories'. Suggestion: use plural 'pictures' and verb 'capture' or 'preserve'.

× Well, I prefer rural areas because in cities there are too many buildings and you can't see so many beautiful views.

✓ Well, I prefer rural areas because in cities there are too many buildings, and you can't see many beautiful views.

Redundant 'so' before 'many' is informal and unnecessary. Use 'see many beautiful views'. Also add a comma before the conjunction. Suggestion: remove 'so' when quantifier 'many' is sufficient.

× But in rural you can see many beautiful sceneries such as blue skies and green grass and so on.

✓ But in rural areas you can see many beautiful scenes, such as blue skies and green grass.

'In rural' is incomplete; use 'in rural areas'. 'Sceneries' is rarely used in English; use 'scenes' or 'landscapes'. Avoid 'and so on' in formal speech. Suggestion: use 'scenes' or 'landscapes' and include 'areas'.

× Well, I think there are many different beautiful views in different countries, so As for me, I think they are all very beautiful.

✓ Well, I think there are many different beautiful views in different countries, so as for me, I think they are all very beautiful.

Capitalization error: 'As' should be lowercase 'as' after a comma. No tense error but correct punctuation/capitalization. Suggestion: keep 'as for me' lowercase and avoid repeating ideas.

× But I prefer my hometown's scenery because I have stayed here for many years and I really love to watch it.

✓ But I prefer my hometown's scenery because I have lived here for many years, and I really love to look at it.

'Have stayed' is grammatical but 'have lived' is more natural for residency (Present perfect issue). Also 'love to watch it' is awkward for scenery; use 'look at it' or 'view it'. Suggestion: use 'have lived here' for continuous residence and 'look at' for appreciating scenery.