Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear and relevant but can be more concise and natural. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. Avoid repetition (e.g., “take the memories” and “keep the memories” say the same thing twice). Also vary vocabulary slightly (use “capture” or “photograph” instead of repeating “take pictures”).

예시: Yes, I do. I enjoy exploring new places and often photograph the views to capture memories. For example, when I visit a seaside town I usually take wide shots of the coastline and close-ups of interesting details, so I can remember how it felt to be there.

제안: The answer addresses the question but is wordy and somewhat rude about rural areas. Begin with a clear preference sentence, then give specific reasons and an example, using linking words (e.g., 'because', 'for example'). Avoid subjective negative phrases like “boring” without explanation. Keep within 3–4 sentences and use more natural phrasing (e.g., ‘I prefer urban views’ rather than ‘I enjoy sceneries’).

예시: I prefer urban views because I like the energy and architectural variety of cities. For example, modern buildings, busy streets and colorful murals catch my eye and make interesting photos. However, I also appreciate rural landscapes for peaceful nature shots occasionally.

제안: Your answer has good content but is repetitive and has some grammar issues. Start with a direct sentence stating your preference, then give specific supporting details and one concrete example. Use linking words (e.g., 'because', 'for example', 'for instance'). Correct grammar (e.g., 'the areas in my country vary' and 'the sites are always interesting' or 'the southern part of Nigeria has interesting landscapes').

예시: I prefer views in my own country because there is so much variety. For instance, the southern part of Nigeria has lush coastlines and mangroves, while the northern regions offer dramatic savannahs and hills, so I rarely run out of new places to photograph.

× I like going out and seeing new places and I like to take the memories with me, so I end up taking pictures to keep the memories as I go.

✓ I like going out and seeing new places, and I like to take memories with me, so I end up taking pictures to keep them as I go.

The phrase 'take the memories with me' is awkward; 'take memories' or 'keep memories' is more natural. Also 'keep the memories as I go' repeats 'memories' and is wordy; replacing the second instance with 'them' avoids repetition. No tense or agreement errors, mainly phrasing and pronoun clarity. Suggestion: use concise noun phrases and replace repeated nouns with pronouns (e.g., 'keep them').

× That is a very interesting question because I've never thought of it before, but looking at it now, I think that I enjoy sceneries in urban areas because they are more sophisticated than the boring views in the rural areas.

✓ That is a very interesting question because I've never thought of it before, but looking at it now, I think that I enjoy scenery in urban areas because it is more sophisticated than the boring views in rural areas.

'Scenery' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized as 'sceneries'. Comparing 'scenery' (uncountable) to 'views' (countable) requires consistent article use. Also 'the rural areas' is overly specific; 'rural areas' without 'the' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'scenery' for general landscapes and omit unnecessary definite articles.

× It just seems like nothing to see.

✓ There just seems to be nothing to see.

Original sentence lacks a clear subject and uses an awkward construction. 'There seems to be nothing to see' is the natural existential construction. This fits the 'there be' pattern and subject-verb placement. Suggestion: use 'There seems to be...' when stating nonexistence.

× I would say that I enjoy views in my own country because there is just a lot of things to see.

✓ I would say that I enjoy views in my own country because there are just a lot of things to see.

The subject 'a lot of things' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'. This is a subject-verb agreement error tied to singular/plural. Suggestion: match verb number to the noun phrase (use 'there are' with plural nouns).

× The areas in my country are varying from each other in very interesting ways and this makes the site always interesting to see.

✓ The areas in my country vary from each other in very interesting ways, and this always makes the sites interesting to see.

'Are varying' is an awkward progressive form; 'vary' is the correct simple present for general truths. 'Site' is singular but seems to refer to multiple places; use 'sites' or 'the scenery' depending on meaning. Also move 'always' before the verb phrase for natural adverb placement. Suggestion: use simple present for general characteristics and ensure plural nouns match intended meaning.

× What I mean is that the South part of Nigeria is very interesting in their landscape.

✓ What I mean is that the southern part of Nigeria is very interesting in its landscape.

'South part' should be 'southern part' (adjective form). 'Their' is an incorrect plural pronoun referring to 'part' (singular); use 'its' to match the singular noun. Also use lowercase 'southern' in running text. Suggestion: use correct adjective forms and match pronoun number to its antecedent.