Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, like), and give specific examples of views rather than vague items. Use linking words to connect ideas and limit to 2–3 supporting details within 1–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing different scenes. For example, I like candid portraits of people and close-up shots of trees and street markets, because they capture emotion and texture.

제안: Provide a direct topic sentence answering the question, then briefly explain reasons using linking words (because/so). Avoid hesitations and redundant phrases. Be specific about what you like in each setting.

예시: It depends, but generally I prefer rural views when I’m in England because I enjoy quiet landscapes and historic villages. However, in India I prefer urban views, such as Mumbai’s busy streets and colourful markets, because I love the energy and variety.

제안: Answer directly and clearly, avoid repetition and unclear phrasing. Give a concise reason and one specific example or contrast. Replace vague statements (“see other people”) with precise ideas (discover new cultures, landscapes).

예시: I usually prefer views in other countries because I’ve already seen most places at home and I want to discover new cultures and landscapes. For instance, I am keen to photograph European architecture and rural villages I’ve never visited.

× Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views, Like for example, I like to take pictures of human beings, uh, some uh, like trees and uh, clothes. So yes, I do like it.

✓ Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views. For example, I like to take pictures of people, trees, and clothes. So yes, I do enjoy it.

The original sentence has redundancy and informal fillers but the main grammatical issue is inconsistent use of noun phrase 'human beings' and listing with unnecessary 'like'. Use 'people' and parallel structure with commas and 'and'. Also 'do like it' is awkward; 'do enjoy it' is more natural. Remove fillers ('uh', 'like') and break into clearer sentences. Suggested improvement: practice forming concise lists with parallel structure and avoid fillers.

× Well, it depends if I like. If I live in a country like England then I prefer to uh see the views like in rural areas.

✓ Well, it depends. If I live in a country like England, then I prefer to see views in rural areas.

Original has awkward clause 'depends if I like' and extra 'like' used unnecessarily. Also filler 'uh'. Correct sentence uses present simple 'depends' and 'prefer to see' to state habitual preference. Remove redundant 'like' and fillers, and add commas for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'depends' with a clearer conditional clause: 'It depends. If I live... then I prefer...'.

× But if I am in my home country in India then I prefer to have views like in urban areas such as Mumbai.

✓ But if I am in my home country, India, then I prefer views in urban areas such as Mumbai.

Original includes unnecessary 'to have views like in' which is wordy and awkward. Use present simple 'prefer' + noun phrase 'views in urban areas'. Also add commas to set off 'India'. Suggestion: Use concise noun phrases after 'prefer': 'prefer views in...'.

× Well, to be very honest, it depends. But most of the time I prefer to view other countries because in my country most of the places I already saw, but so I and I am very interested to see all other countries as well.

✓ Well, to be honest, it depends. But most of the time I prefer to visit other countries because I have already seen most places in my country, and I am very interested in seeing other countries as well.

Multiple tense and word-choice errors: 'prefer to view other countries' should be 'prefer to visit other countries'; 'most of the places I already saw' mixes past simple without auxiliary—use present perfect 'I have already seen most places'. 'but so I and I am' is ungrammatical and redundant. Also 'interested to see' should be 'interested in seeing'. Suggestion: Use 'have seen' for life experiences, 'interested in doing' for preferences, and avoid redundant conjunctions.

× So yeah, I prefer to see other people.

✓ So yeah, I prefer to see other countries.

This appears to be a meaning error rather than pure grammar: earlier sentence discussed preferring other countries, but the student said 'other people', which changes meaning. If intention was countries, correct object should be plural 'countries'. If they meant people, it's grammatical but inconsistent. Assuming intent to match context, replace 'people' with 'countries'. Suggestion: Ensure noun objects match intended meaning; maintain consistency across answers.