Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cần cải thiện phát âm và lựa chọn từ cho chính xác (ví dụ: 'places' thay vì 'Plex', 'scenes' thay vì 'scents'). Cấu trúc câu nên rõ ràng hơn: mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn, sau đó nêu 1-2 chi tiết hỗ trợ. Tránh lặp từ và rút gọn câu không cần thiết. Hãy chú ý ngữ pháp số ít/ số nhiều (a large collection of photos) và giảm tiếng ậm ừ (umm).

예시: Yes, I do. I enjoy exploring new places and photographing different scenes, especially landscapes and city views. My goal is to build a large collection of landscape and city photographs, so I often visit parks and urban areas to practice.

제안: Cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn, tránh ngắt quãng và lỗi từ (ví dụ: 'when it came tonight' không đúng; 'skyscrapers' và 'skyline' sử dụng đúng chính tả). Sử dụng liên từ để nối ý (for example, especially, because) và miêu tả cụ thể về thời gian hoặc cảm giác (e.g., at sunset). Hạn chế lặp lại và sửa ngữ pháp (the skyline looks spectacular).

예시: I prefer urban views because I live in the city and I love the skyscrapers and skyline. For example, at sunset the lights on the buildings create a spectacular scene that looks especially dramatic from the riverfront.

제안: Sửa ngữ pháp và lựa chọn từ: tránh lặp 'my country' và sửa cấu trúc câu điều kiện (If I had the chance, I would travel...). Dùng động từ ở dạng đúng ('to explore' not 'to exploring') và đúng từ vựng ('new views and scenes'). Bắt đầu với câu chủ đề rõ ràng và thêm chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ nơi muốn đến và lý do).

예시: I appreciate the views in my own country because they are familiar and diverse, especially the coastal and mountain areas. However, if I had the chance, I would like to travel abroad to explore new landscapes and cultural scenes, such as visiting historic cities in Europe to see different architecture.

× For me absolutely yes, because I'm really into exploring new Plex and discovering new scents so I love taking pictures of various fields.

✓ For me, absolutely yes, because I'm really into exploring new places and discovering new scenes, so I love taking pictures of various fields.

'Plex' is likely a typo for 'places' and 'scents' is incorrect in this context; 'scenes' is appropriate when talking about views. Also add a comma after 'For me' and before 'so' for clarity. Use correct vocabulary and punctuation.

× Umm also my goal is to build a large collections of photo of landscape and cities.

✓ Also, my goal is to build a large collection of photos of landscapes and cities.

'Large collections' should be singular 'a large collection' or plural without 'a'; 'photo' should be plural 'photos'; 'landscape' should be plural 'landscapes' when speaking generally. Add a comma after 'Also'.

× To be honest, I'm living in the city so I prefer the uh, urban views because I love these skyscrapers and the spectacular skyline, especially when it came tonight.

✓ To be honest, I live in the city, so I prefer urban views because I love skyscrapers and the spectacular skyline, especially at night.

Use simple present 'I live' for permanent/state facts instead of 'I'm living'. 'When it came tonight' is incorrect; choose 'at night' to refer to time. Remove filler 'the uh' and unnecessary 'the' before 'spectacular skyline'.

× All the lines are down and they spectacular.

✓ All the lights are on and they are spectacular.

Likely intended 'lights' not 'lines'; correct verb and structure: include verb 'are' before 'spectacular'. Use 'on' not 'down' to indicate illumination. Ensure subject-verb structure is complete.

× Uh, the ski scape feels.

✓ Uh, the skyline feels impressive.

'Ski scape' is a misspelling of 'skyscape' or 'skyline'; 'feels' needs an adjective to complete the idea, e.g., 'feels impressive'. Provide a clear adjective to convey meaning.

× Umm to be honest, I'm a big fan of my country's and I love all these various views of my country.

✓ Umm, to be honest, I'm a big fan of my country and I love its various views.

Do not use possessive with an apostrophe 'country's' without a noun following it. Use 'my country' or 'my country's views'. Replace repetition 'of my country' with 'its' for conciseness.

× But however if I if I had a chance, I also want to travel to another country to exploring and discovering news views and news scenes.

✓ But if I had the chance, I would also want to travel to another country to explore and discover new views and new scenes.

After 'to' use base verb 'explore' and 'discover', not '-ing' forms. Use conditional 'If I had the chance, I would...' for hypothetical situations. 'News' should be 'new'. Remove duplicated 'if I'.