Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and avoid repetition. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (tense and articles) and use more precise vocabulary (e.g., “scenes” or “scenery”).

예시: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views because photographs help me remember places. For example, I often photograph cityscapes and mountain scenery, which reminds me of the colours and atmosphere when I look back.

제안: Answer directly and avoid hesitation. Use one clear reason and support it with a specific example, using linking words like “because” or “for example.” Correct article usage and avoid repeating words.

예시: I prefer views in urban areas because cities offer diverse architecture and lively street scenes. For example, I enjoy photographing modern buildings and busy markets, which give me more variety than quiet countryside.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence and follow with specific examples. Use correct grammar for possession and plural nouns, and name places accurately. Keep sentences concise and use linking words like “for example” correctly.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because Japan has many beautiful landscapes. For example, Mount Fuji’s iconic silhouette and the forests of Shirakami-Sanchi are stunning subjects for photography.

× Yes, I love it because if I took took the many of the pictures I can see, I can see the lots of different type of view and then I can remember in my memory.

✓ Yes, I love it because if I take many of the pictures I see, I can remember the different types of views.

The student used 'took took' (incorrect past) and mixed past and present modal meaning. Use present tense 'take' in this general conditional (zero/first conditional) to express habitual action. Also simplify 'the many of the pictures I can see' to 'many of the pictures I see', 'lots of different type of view' to 'different types of views', and omit redundant 'in my memory'. Suggestion: practice forming first conditional and use base verb for habitual/general statements.

× I prefer view in urban areas because yeah, rural area is very I can take the picture the very nice of you.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because in rural areas I can also take very nice pictures.

The student used singular 'view' where plural 'views' is needed when speaking generally. Also 'rural area' should be plural 'rural areas' for generality. The original phrase 'the very nice of you' is ungrammatical; replace with 'very nice pictures'. Suggestion: use plural nouns when speaking generally and pair nouns properly with modifiers.

× But in the urban areas, I can, I can check the I can take the picture of very nice of you.

✓ But in urban areas, I can take pictures of very nice views.

This sentence is repetitive and contains incorrect fragments ('check the I can take', 'very nice of you'). Simplify to a clear subject-verb-object structure: 'I can take pictures of very nice views.' Remove redundant 'I can' repetitions. Suggestion: reduce repetition and keep a simple subject-verb-object order.

× So that's why I like, I prefer the urban area.

✓ So that's why I prefer urban areas.

Using 'the urban area' implies a specific single area; the speaker means urban areas in general, so use the plural 'urban areas' and omit redundant 'I like' when already saying 'I prefer'. Suggestion: when comparing general preferences, use plural nouns.

× I prefer view in my country because my in Japan there has a lots of very nice review, for example through Mount Fuji and like Shirakami Sanchi or so, Japan has lots of very nice of has a lot of very nice of you.

✓ I prefer views in my country because Japan has a lot of very nice scenery, for example Mount Fuji and Shirakami-Sanchi.

Multiple plural and word choice errors: 'view' should be 'views'; 'my in Japan there has a lots of' is ungrammatical—use 'Japan has a lot of' or 'there are a lot of' plus the noun. 'Very nice review' is wrong word choice; use 'scenery' or 'views'. Remove repetitions 'has lots of very nice of has a lot of very nice of you.' Suggestion: use correct noun forms (a lot of + plural noun) and precise vocabulary like 'scenery' or 'views'.