Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Give a clearer, more grammatical response with concise points and correct word choice. Start with a topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct verbs/plurals (e.g., pictures, friends). Avoid redundant phrases like “process and the moments” and unclear phrasing such as “wait for their free.”

예시: Yes — I enjoy taking pictures when I travel because they help me remember special moments. For example, I photograph landscapes and local markets and later share the best shots with my friends on social media, which always sparks interesting conversations.

제안: Make the answer more natural and grammatical: give a clear topic sentence, then two specific reasons with linking words. Correct comparative structures and word forms (e.g., fresher air, less crowded). Keep sentences short and avoid repetition.

예시: I prefer rural views because they offer peaceful natural scenery. For instance, I enjoy mountains and rivers, and the fresher air and fewer people help me relax after a busy week in the city.

제안: Use correct nouns and articles and be more specific about what you mean by “foreign country wheels.” Start with a clear preference, then give a concrete reason and an example. Use linking words like “because” and “for example.”

예시: I prefer views in other countries because they feel more exotic and offer new perspectives. For example, seeing traditional architecture and unfamiliar landscapes abroad often inspires me to think differently and take more creative photos.

× I love taking picture when I travel, this help me remember the process and the moments and I like to share with my friend on social media and wait for their free.

✓ I love taking pictures when I travel; this helps me remember the places and moments, and I like to share them with my friends on social media and wait for their feedback.

Multiple noun-number and agreement issues: 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' because 'taking pictures' is general; 'this help' requires 'helps' to agree with singular subject 'this'; 'the process' is unclear and better as 'the places'; 'share with my friend' should be 'share them with my friends'—use plural 'friends' and object pronoun 'them' to refer to 'pictures'; 'wait for their free' is incorrect; likely intended 'wait for their feedback'. Suggestions: ensure nouns match singular/plural context, make verb agree with its subject, use appropriate pronouns for noun reference, and choose correct collocations (e.g., 'wait for feedback').

× I prefer rural areas because I like scenery of nature like mountains, rivers and fields and I like the freshener air in the rural area and rest crowded people than the city. It's make me more relaxed.

✓ I prefer rural areas because I like natural scenery such as mountains, rivers, and fields, and I like the fresher air in rural areas and the fact that there are fewer crowded people than in the city. It makes me more relaxed.

Adjective/adverb and other related errors: 'scenery of nature' should be 'natural scenery'; 'like' followed by examples should use 'such as'; 'freshener air' is incorrect comparative form—use 'fresher air'; 'in the rural area' should be 'in rural areas' for consistency; 'rest crowded people than the city' is ungrammatical—meaning likely 'there are fewer crowded people than in the city' so use 'fewer' for countable people and include comparison structure 'than in the city'; 'It's make' requires 'It makes' for subject-verb agreement. Suggestions: use correct adjective forms, comparative 'fresher' and 'fewer', ensure proper sentence structure and subject-verb agreement.

× I prefer foreign country wheels because the foreign country make me feel exotic and exciting and it always give me a fresh perspective.

✓ I prefer foreign countries because foreign places make me feel excited and give me a fresh perspective.

Several errors: 'foreign country wheels' is nonsensical—probably 'foreign countries' or 'foreign travel'; 'the foreign country make' needs subject-verb agreement: 'foreign places make' (plural subject with plural verb) or 'a foreign country makes'; 'make me feel exotic and exciting' is incorrect because 'exotic' describes places, not the person; use 'make me feel excited' to describe the person's feeling; 'it always give' requires 'it always gives' or adjust to plural 'they always give'. Suggestions: choose correct nouns ('countries' or 'places'), ensure subject-verb agreement, and use adjectives appropriately to describe feelings versus things.