Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, sentence structure and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and prepositions, and avoid unnecessary details that confuse meaning. Use one or two supporting details with linking words. For example, say you enjoy photographing landscapes and people, and mention where you share your photos. Pronunciation and fluency should be steady; pause briefly between ideas.

예시: Yes, I do. I'm a photographer, so I enjoy taking pictures of different scenes. For example, when I travel I often photograph landscapes and local people, and then I post my best shots on Instagram or TikTok.

제안: Make sentences grammatically correct and more specific. Begin with a clear topic sentence stating your general preference or that it depends. Use linking words (for example, however, while) and give concrete examples (e.g., city skylines, factories, mountain ranges). Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms.

예시: It depends on my trip. When I'm in a city I like photographing urban scenes, such as skyline views and industrial buildings, while in the countryside I prefer capturing mountains and natural landscapes.

제안: Clarify and correct grammar, and provide a clear reason. Start with a direct topic sentence (I prefer views in other countries) and follow with specific reasons using linking words (because, so). Give an example of what is new or interesting abroad (architecture, cultures, colors). Avoid repetition and fix verb tenses and articles.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because I was born and raised here, so foreign places offer new scenes and cultures. For example, I enjoy photographing unique architecture and colorful street markets that I don't see at home.

× Basically I'm a photographer so I love taking pictures.

✓ Basically I'm a photographer, so I love taking pictures.

This sentence is mostly correct; only a missing comma was needed to separate clauses for clarity. Use a comma before coordinating conjunction 'so' when it joins two independent clauses.

× For example when I'm travelling I taking picture about the environment, people store our baby food and I posting on my Instagram or probably on my Tiktok.

✓ For example, when I'm travelling I take pictures of the environment, people, stores and our baby food, and I post them on my Instagram or probably on my TikTok.

Errors: incorrect verb forms 'taking' and 'posting' after auxiliary missing (should be simple present 'I take', 'I post'); count nouns need plural 'pictures'; incorrect preposition 'about' should be 'of' when describing subjects of pictures; 'store' should be plural 'stores'; missing commas for list. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual actions and correct plural nouns and prepositions.

× It depends when I'm traveling.

✓ It depends when I'm traveling.

This sentence is correct as-is: 'It depends' is appropriate for conditional preference. No grammar change needed.

× If I traveling on urban areas so I like to taking the industrial industrial but if I travelling in a rural areas I will taking a mountain.

✓ If I travel to urban areas, I like taking industrial photos, but if I travel to rural areas I will take pictures of mountains.

Errors: missing base form after 'If' conditional — use 'If I travel' not 'If I traveling'; incorrect preposition 'on urban areas' should be 'to urban areas'; unnecessary 'so' after condition; 'like to taking' should be 'like taking' or 'like to take'; repetition 'industrial industrial' removed; 'a rural areas' incorrect article/numbering — use 'rural areas'; 'will taking' should be 'will take'. Suggestion: use correct verb forms for conditionals and match plural nouns/articles.

× I prefer fuse in other country because I born and live here in my my in my own country.

✓ I prefer places in other countries because I was born and live here in my own country.

Errors: 'prefer fuse' unclear — likely 'prefer places' or 'I prefer views' (choose 'places' here); 'in other country' needs plural 'in other countries' or 'in another country'; tense and form for birth: use past simple 'I was born'; redundant repetition 'my my in my' removed; keep 'live here' present simple to indicate current status. Suggestion: use correct nouns, article/number agreement, and appropriate past/simple present tenses.

× So I prefer feels in other countries because I can I can feel that I never seen before.

✓ So I prefer being in other countries because I can experience things I have never seen before.

Errors: 'prefer feels' incorrect collocation — use 'prefer being' or 'prefer places'; repeated 'I can I can' duplication removed; 'feel that I never seen before' uses incorrect verb forms: use present perfect 'have never seen' and 'experience' rather than 'feel' for new sights. Suggestion: use correct verbs and present perfect for life experiences, and avoid repetition.