Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn tự nhiên và thể hiện cảm xúc, nhưng có vài lỗi ngữ pháp và lựa từ không chính xác (ví dụ: "it's time I capture", "be preserved special moment"). Bạn nên dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, theo sau bởi chi tiết cụ thể, và tránh lặp từ. Ngoài ra rút ngắn câu để không quá dài (tối đa 5 câu). Hãy dùng liên từ phù hợp để mạch lạc (e.g., "because", "for example", "such as").

예시: I love taking photos of different views because they capture unique moments. For example, I often photograph sunsets and city skylines, which make me feel adventurous. I enjoy framing landscapes and urban scenes to preserve memories and share them with friends.

제안: Câu trả lời rõ ràng và có lý do cụ thể, nhưng có một vài chỗ cần chỉnh ngữ pháp và lựa từ (ví dụ: "They give me a sense of relief" hợp lý nhưng câu cuối "It was amazing" không cần thiết và làm giảm tính liên kết). Bạn có thể mở rộng bằng ví dụ cụ thể và kết hợp liên từ để mạch lạc hơn.

예시: I prefer rural views because they make me feel calm and relaxed. For instance, standing on a mountain or walking through a field helps me forget stress from a busy day. I especially appreciate the fresh air and quiet surroundings, which restore my energy.

제안: Câu trả lời thiếu rõ ràng, nhiều ngập ngừng và lỗi cấu trúc khiến thông điệp khó hiểu. Bạn cần nói trực tiếp câu chủ đề (e.g., "I prefer views in my own country"), tránh tiếng ừ ờ, và giải thích rõ lý do bằng câu hoàn chỉnh. Nếu chưa đi du lịch nhiều, hãy nói thẳng và nêu kế hoạch hoặc mong muốn khám phá thêm.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because I feel a strong connection to its landscapes. I haven't had many opportunities to travel around Vietnam yet, so I look forward to exploring more places there and photographing their scenery.

× I really enjoy taking pictures of different views because it's time I capture a landscape or a cityscape.

✓ I really enjoy taking pictures of different views because it's the time I capture a landscape or a cityscape.

Original used 'it's time I capture' which mixes a fixed expression and a verb form incorrectly. Use 'it's the time I capture' to indicate a period when the action happens. Suggestion: use 'it's the time I capture' or rephrase to 'because it's when I capture'.

× It allows me to be preserved special moment, like a breathtaking sunset and the beach or the city skyline at night.

✓ It allows me to preserve special moments, like a breathtaking sunset, the beach, or the city skyline at night.

Problems: incorrect passive 'to be preserved' and missing plural 'moments' and missing commas. Use active infinitive 'to preserve' and plural 'moments'. Also add definite article appropriately: 'the beach' and 'the city skyline'.

× They give me a sense of relief after a hectic day and I enjoy the fresh air and quiet surroundings. It was amazing.

✓ They give me a sense of relief after a hectic day and I enjoy the fresh air and quiet surroundings. It is amazing.

The speaker is describing a general feeling, so present tense 'is' is appropriate rather than past 'was'. Use present simple to match 'give' and 'enjoy'.

× Well, I'm rather than with, uh, in our, in my, my own country because I feel my country is really on awesome.

✓ Well, I prefer my own country because I think my country is really awesome.

Original is confused with filler words and incorrect phrases 'I'm rather than with' and 'on awesome'. Replace with clear verb 'prefer' and adjective 'awesome'. Also change 'I feel my country is' to 'I think my country is' for natural English.

× Uh, and I until now, I haven't had any change to experience, uh, uh, the experience, the views, the whole view in Vietnam, so.

✓ And until now, I haven't had any chance to experience the views, the whole scenery in Vietnam.

Errors: 'change' should be 'chance'; redundant words 'experience, the experience'; awkward 'the whole view' better as 'the whole scenery'. Keep present perfect 'haven't had' to indicate up to now. Suggestion: 'I haven't had any chance to experience the views or the full scenery in Vietnam.'