Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 문장 구조를 더 명확히 하고 대명사 일치 및 어휘 선택을 개선하세요. 예를 들어, 주제문으로 시작한 뒤 바다 사진을 좋아하는 구체적 이유(빛, 색깔, 파도 움직임 등)를 연결사로 자연스럽게 덧붙이세요. 또한 'their' 대신 'its'를 사용하고, 'moments of waves'는 'the way the waves move' 등으로 바꾸면 더 자연스럽습니다.

예시: Yes, I do. I like photographing many subjects, but I especially enjoy shooting the ocean because of its vivid colors and the way the waves move. For instance, at sunrise the light makes the water sparkle, which creates striking contrasts in photos.

제안: 불필요한 망설임(uh, umm)과 말끝의 불완전한 설명을 줄이세요. 질문에 직접 답한 뒤 연결사(for example, last week 등)를 사용해 구체적 경험을 간결히 설명하세요. 또한 이름이나 장소를 말할 때 명확하게 발음하고 문장을 완성하세요.

예시: I prefer rural areas because they have many flowers and trees, and the atmosphere is much more peaceful. For example, last week I visited the countryside near Chungcheng where I walked along fields of wildflowers and took several photos of the calm landscape.

제안: 문장을 완성하고 의미가 분명하도록 정리하세요. 이유를 제시할 때 구체적 근거(예: 건축 양식, 색채, 문화적 배경)를 포함하고, 불필요한 감탄사나 어색한 표현('laugh when')을 제거하세요.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because they often feature unique buildings and magnificent architecture. For example, when I visit historical cities I enjoy photographing ornate facades and unusual skylines that you don't see at home.

× I enjoy taking pictures of everything but especially the ocean because I like their colors and the moments of waves.

✓ I enjoy taking pictures of everything, but especially the ocean because I like its colors and the moments when the waves break.

The plural pronoun 'their' is incorrect because 'ocean' is singular; use the singular possessive 'its' (Grammar problem type ID 12). Also 'moments of waves' is awkward; use 'moments when the waves break' or 'the moments of the waves' for clarity. Suggestion: match pronoun number to its antecedent and use a clearer noun phrase.

× Uh, in my case, last week I went to the countryside, Umm Chung Cheng booked the.

✓ Last week I went to the countryside; Chung Cheng had booked the trip for me.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear (Grammar problem type ID 26). It lacks a clear verb phrase and correct object placement. The correction provides a coherent subject-verb-object structure and clarifies who booked what. Suggestion: avoid filler sounds, state the subject and verb clearly and place objects after verbs.

× I prefer views in other countries, usually there have umm special buildings and magnificent architecture and laugh when.

✓ I prefer views in other countries; usually there are special buildings and magnificent architecture that make me smile.

The phrase 'there have' is ungrammatical for existence; use 'there are' for plural existence (also relates to 'There be issue' but main problem is sentence structure and missing subject for 'laugh') (Grammar problem type ID 26). 'Laugh when' is incomplete and unclear; replace with a complete clause such as 'that make me smile.' Suggestion: use correct existential construction 'there are' and complete clauses to express reactions.