Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Usa risposte più concise e naturali, iniziando con una frase tematica chiara e poi aggiungendo un dettaglio concreto. Evita ripetizioni come “taking pictures” due volte e cerca di includere una ragione specifica o un esempio per rendere la risposta più ricca.

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because it helps me capture special moments. For example, I often take photos during sunsets to remember the colors and atmosphere.

제안: Correggi gli errori di pronuncia e le ripetizioni, e struttura la risposta con una frase tematica seguita da ragioni specifiche. Usa connettori semplici come “because” o “so” per rendere il discorso coerente e limita la risposta a massimo 4 frasi.

예시: I prefer rural areas because they feel more peaceful and quiet. For instance, I like photographing fields and forests where there is less noise and more natural light.

제안: Semplifica la frase principale e correggi gli errori grammaticali e i riferimenti confusi (es. “him” e “it”). Spiega chiaramente il motivo e fornisci un esempio specifico di cosa ti piace fotografare all’estero. Mantieni la risposta naturale e non più di 4-5 frasi.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because they are new and rare to me. For example, when I travel abroad I photograph local architecture and landscapes so I can remember the trip when I’m back home.

× I personally prefer a rural rural areas because it seems more it feels more serenity in the in them instead of urban areas which are more chaotic.

✓ I personally prefer rural areas because they feel more serene than urban areas, which are more chaotic.

The original sentence has repeated words ('a rural rural areas') and mismatched singular/plural forms. 'A' is singular and cannot be used with the plural 'areas', so remove 'a' and use the plural noun 'areas'. 'It seems more it feels more serenity in the in them' mixes subjects and structures; use a simple, consistent subject-verb construction: 'they feel more serene'. Also use the comparative structure 'more serene than' for clear contrast and place the relative clause 'which are more chaotic' after 'urban areas'. Suggestions: remove duplicate words, match determiner number with noun, choose one verb phrase ('feel') and use appropriate comparative phrasing. Suggested practice: rewrite similar contrasts using 'more ... than' and check determiners (a/an/the) match singular or plural nouns.

× I prefer views in other countries because I can't see them every day, so I like to capture him to look it when I'm at home in or in a second moment.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I can't see them every day, so I like to capture them to look at when I'm at home later.

The original sentence uses wrong pronouns ('him', 'it') and awkward phrasing ('in or in a second moment'). Pronouns must agree with their antecedent: 'views' is plural and requires 'them'. The verb phrase for photographing something is 'capture' + object, and to express looking at the photos later use 'to look at' and a natural time expression like 'later' or 'when I'm at home'. Also keep tense consistent in present simple for general preferences. Suggestions: replace incorrect pronouns with 'them', use 'look at' for viewing photos, and use 'later' instead of unclear phrases.