Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce hesitation and repetition, correct grammar and use clearer vocabulary. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid filler sounds (uh) and fix noun phrases (e.g., "mountains and forests").

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views, especially natural landscapes. For example, I often photograph mountains and forests at sunrise because the light makes them look dramatic and peaceful, and these photos help me remember the calm feeling I experience when hiking.

제안: Improve sentence structure and use correct vocabulary. Start with a direct statement of preference, then give a specific reason using linking words (because, so, for example). Fix collocations ("rural areas", "enjoy the fresh air").

예시: I prefer rural areas because they are much quieter and more relaxing than cities. For example, I can enjoy the fresh air and go for long walks without the noise and crowds you usually find in urban places.

제안: Avoid repetition and hesitations; give a clearer structured answer. If saying "it depends" explain the conditions, then give a concise preference with specific examples and linking words. Use correct grammar and pluralization (mountains, oceans, forests).

예시: It depends, but I prefer views in my own country because it has a variety of landscapes such as mountains, oceans and forests. For instance, I live near a quiet village where I can easily visit different natural spots, which I find very appealing.

× I love photographing mountains at forest because they look so dramatic at the sunrise.

✓ I love photographing mountains in the forest because they look so dramatic at sunrise.

Use the preposition 'in' with 'forest' to indicate location ('in the forest'), and omit the definite article before 'sunrise' when speaking generally. Suggestion: use 'in the forest' and 'at sunrise' or simply 'at sunrise' without 'the'.

× Uh, and taking for, for two, uh, and taking picture when I go hiking helps me remind, uh, remember the peaceful.

✓ Also, taking pictures when I go hiking helps me remember the peaceful feeling.

Original is disfluent and has word order and noun form errors. Use plural 'pictures' and verb 'remember' with a direct object ('the peaceful feeling'). Remove filler words. Suggestion: keep sentences concise and use correct noun plurals and direct objects.

× I prefer rural early areas because they are much quieter and more peaceful than cities.

✓ I prefer rural areas because they are much quieter and more peaceful than cities.

'Early' is incorrect here; 'rural areas' is the intended phrase. Remove 'early'. Suggestion: choose appropriate adjective collocations: 'rural areas' or 'urban areas'.

× For example, I can't relax and nature enjoying the fresh air and go for a long walk without the noise and the crowd you find under areas.

✓ For example, I can't relax in cities; I enjoy the fresh air and can go for a long walk without the noise and crowds you find in urban areas.

Multiple issues: missing prepositions ('in cities'), incorrect verb forms ('enjoying' should be 'I enjoy'), wrong noun form ('crowd' -> 'crowds'), and wrong preposition 'under areas' -> 'in urban areas'. Suggestion: split into clearer clauses and use correct prepositions and plural nouns.

× It depends.

✓ It depends.

This sentence is correct in present tense and fits the context; no change needed.

× Actually, I really love my, uh, my country.

✓ Actually, I really love my country.

Redundant repetition 'my, uh, my' is disfluent but grammatically the pronoun 'my' before 'country' is correct. Remove the extra filler. Suggestion: avoid repeating pronouns and fillers.

× I love, uh, because there is a mountain, there is, uh, uh, ocean and the forest, there's multiple things and, and I live by nearby village, umm, that's kind of quite.

✓ I love it because there are mountains, an ocean and forests nearby; there are many different things, and I live near a village, which is quite quiet.

Several errors: use plural 'are' with plural nouns ('there are mountains'), article 'an ocean', plural 'forests' or 'a forest', misuse of 'by nearby village' -> 'near a village' and 'that's kind of quite' -> 'which is quite quiet'. Also use semicolons or separate clauses for clarity. Suggestion: use 'there is/are' correctly with countable nouns, choose correct articles, and use 'near' for proximity.