Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, use correct verb forms and articles, and add one specific supporting detail with a linking word. Aim for 2–3 sentences and include a precise example.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because they help me preserve memories. For example, I often photograph sunsets at the beach so I can remember family trips and the exact colors of the sky.

제안: Give a clear preference statement and use correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Replace fillers and unclear words, use linking words (because, so) and provide one specific reason or example. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

예시: To be honest, I prefer rural areas to big cities because they have more parks and fresh air, which benefits my physical and mental health. For instance, I enjoy walking in the countryside where the quiet environment helps me relax.

제안: Answer directly and avoid repetition. Use correct phrases (e.g., "views in my own country") and correct repetition mistakes. Provide a concise reason and a specific example or comparison using a linking word like "because" or "for example".

예시: I prefer the views in my own country because many areas have beautiful parks and countryside. For example, visiting nearby rural towns lets me enjoy wide green spaces and quiet walks, which improve my mood.

× Yes, yes, I prefer to taking pictures of a different views because it helps us to retain the memories of different things in our phone and also reminds us the good memories of our life.

✓ Yes, yes, I prefer taking pictures of different views because it helps us retain memories of various things on our phones and also reminds us of the good memories in our lives.

The verb 'prefer' should be followed by the base verb or gerund without an extra 'to'; 'prefer to taking' is incorrect. Use 'prefer taking' or 'prefer to take'. 'A different views' has an article-number mismatch: 'views' is plural so remove 'a' (Singular and plural issue). 'Retain the memories of different things in our phone' is unidiomatic: use 'retain memories of various things on our phones'. Also add 'of' after 'reminds us' and pluralize 'life' to 'lives' to match 'us'. Suggestions: use 'prefer taking', match singular/plural with articles and nouns, use 'on our phones' for stored items, and include 'of' after 'remind'.

× MMM to be honest I like the villagers instead of big cities because blazes has a lot of parks, greenery and fresh air where it is very beneficial for physical and mental well-being.

✓ To be honest, I prefer villages to big cities because villages have a lot of parks, greenery, and fresh air, which are very beneficial for physical and mental well-being.

'I like the villagers' incorrectly refers to people; context asks about views/places, so use 'villages'. 'Instead of' is less natural than 'prefer ... to ...' for comparison. 'Blazes' appears to be a misspelling of 'villages' and also subject-verb agreement requires 'villages have' (plural). 'Where it is very beneficial' is incorrect: use a relative clause 'which are very beneficial' and match plural subject. Suggestions: choose correct noun ('villages'), use 'prefer X to Y' for preference, ensure subject-verb agreement, and use 'which are' for benefits applying to plural nouns.

× I like the news of my home country because in my home country there is a lot of rural areas where we can enjoy the parks and greenery and fresh air.

✓ I prefer the scenery of my home country because there are many rural areas where we can enjoy parks, greenery, and fresh air.

'I like the news of my home country' is incorrect meaning; likely intended 'scenery' or 'views'. 'There is a lot of rural areas' mixes singular 'is' with plural 'areas' (There be issue / Singular and plural issue): use 'there are many rural areas'. 'Enjoy the parks and greenery and fresh air' is acceptable but can be streamlined. Suggestions: use accurate noun ('scenery' or 'views'), ensure 'there are' for plural, and use 'many' instead of 'a lot of' for formality.

× This quieter environment gives us gives us the fresh air which is beneficial for our mental.

✓ This quieter environment gives us fresh air, which is beneficial for our mental well-being.

The sentence repeats 'gives us' twice; remove duplication. 'Beneficial for our mental' is incomplete; add the noun 'well-being'. Also insert a comma before the nonrestrictive relative clause 'which is beneficial...'. Suggestions: eliminate repeated words, use complete noun phrases like 'mental well-being', and punctuate the relative clause correctly.