Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and use correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail with a linking word. Avoid repetition (e.g., “taking pictures” vs “photographing” and repeated “recording”). Use past or present continuous appropriately. Also vary vocabulary (memories, moments, scenery) and correct tense and article use.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they help me preserve memories of trips and special moments. For example, when I visited the coast last year, I photographed the sunrise to remember the colours and atmosphere.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence and then one clear reason with a specific example. Improve grammar (use singular/plural correctly), use linking words such as “because” and “for example,” and avoid awkward phrases like “it's like a countryside.” Keep to two or three sentences maximum.

예시: I prefer rural areas to urban ones because the countryside offers more varied and peaceful scenery. For example, I enjoy walking in fields and photographing hills and rivers, which I rarely find in cities.

제안: Answer directly and correct grammar (use singular/plural and articles). Use a linking contrast word like “although” correctly and give a specific example of varied landscapes. Avoid filler sounds (umm). Keep the answer to two sentences: statement plus supporting detail.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because, although it is small, it has diverse landscapes such as mountains, beaches and plateaus. For instance, within a few hours’ drive I can photograph mountain scenery in the morning and coastal views in the afternoon.

× I like taking pictures or photographing for various views because it's like capture my memory and recording, recording maybe like a trip or a memory I have.

✓ I like taking pictures of different views because it captures my memories and records trips or moments I have.

Original sentence misused verbs after 'it's like' and used base forms instead of appropriate verb forms. 'It's like capture my memory and recording' should be replaced with a clear clause: 'it captures my memories and records trips or moments.' Use third-person singular present 'captures' to agree with 'it' and use the base verb 'records' similarly. Also change 'picture or photographing for various views' to the natural phrase 'taking pictures of different views.' Use plural 'memories' for general recollections and 'records' as a verb rather than the noun 'recording.' Suggestions: replace informal fillers and repetition, keep consistent verb forms and subject-verb agreement.

× I like rural areas rather than urban areas because it's like a countryside and there are more views, significant scenery can admire.

✓ I prefer rural areas to urban ones because they are like the countryside and have more scenic views to admire.

The phrase 'it's like a countryside' is incorrect: use 'the countryside' or 'a countryside' with clearer reference; better to use plural or 'ones' for 'urban areas.' 'Significant scenery can admire' is ungrammatical: use active structure 'have more scenic views to admire.' Also use 'prefer X to Y' rather than 'like X rather than Y.' Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'they are' for plural 'rural areas.' Suggestions: use 'prefer... to...' and adjective 'scenic' to modify 'views.'

× So I think rather than urban area, I'm more like rural areas.

✓ So I think, rather than urban areas, I prefer rural areas.

Original mixes structures and uses 'I'm more like rural areas' which is incorrect. Use 'I prefer rural areas' to express comparison; maintain plural 'urban areas' and 'rural areas' consistently. Avoid 'more like' with plural noun; use 'prefer' or 'I like rural areas more.' Suggestions: keep parallel structure and clear comparative phrasing.

× I think I prefer my the view to my country because umm although our country are small but it have barriers of geographic like mountain, ocean, beach, plateau.

✓ I think I prefer the views in my country because, although our country is small, it has different geographical features like mountains, oceans, beaches, and plateaus.

Multiple number and article errors: 'my the view to my country' is incorrect—use 'the views in my country.' Subject-verb agreement errors: 'our country are small' should be 'our country is small.' 'it have barriers of geographic' should be 'it has different geographical features.' Use plural nouns for features (mountains, oceans, beaches, plateaus) and correct adjective form 'geographical.' Suggestions: ensure correct article use ('the views in my country'), subject-verb agreement, and pluralization of natural features.

× It's different kind of the view.

✓ They offer different kinds of views.

'It's different kind of the view' is ungrammatical: use plural 'kinds' to match 'views' and avoid unnecessary 'the.' Use a clear subject 'They' referring to the country's landscapes, or 'They offer' to form a full sentence. Alternatively, 'There are different kinds of views.' Suggestions: match singular/plural between 'kind(s)' and 'view(s),' and remove incorrect definite article usage.