Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Keep your answer direct and natural. Use correct word choice (views, not viewers), avoid redundancy (photo/photograph), and limit length to 3–4 concise sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples with brief reasons. Use linking words like “for example” and “because” correctly.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because scenery often provides interesting subjects for photos. For example, I like photographing mountains at sunrise because the light creates dramatic colors, and I also enjoy capturing city lights at night for their vibrant atmosphere.

제안: Be more concise and use correct grammar and vocabulary (rural areas, green scenery). Provide one clear reason and avoid repeating words. Use a linking phrase to connect opinion and reason, and keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I prefer rural views because the green landscapes and mountains are calming. For instance, seeing wide fields and forests helps me relax and clears my mind after a busy week.

제안: Start with a direct topic sentence giving your preference, then give a specific reason and one brief example. Avoid repeating phrases like “different countries” and watch singular/plural agreement (“it’s” vs “they’re”).

예시: I prefer views in other countries because they offer new and unfamiliar scenery to explore. For example, I enjoy visiting coastal towns abroad to see different architectural styles and landscapes that I don’t have at home.

× I like taking pictures of different viewers because the scenery often gives me a great materials for photos and photographing.

✓ I like taking pictures of different views because the scenery often gives me great material for photos and photographing.

The student used 'viewers' (people who watch) instead of 'views' (scenes) and combined singular/plural incorrectly: 'a great materials' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'materials'. Correct nouns: 'views' and uncountable singular 'material' without 'a'. Suggestion: use 'views' for scenes and 'great material' for uncountable noun, or 'great materials' without 'a' if intending plural.

× It makes me relax and for example, I enjoy taking pictures of mountains or sunrise or city lights during the night.

✓ It helps me relax; for example, I enjoy taking pictures of mountains, sunrises, or city lights at night.

'Makes me relax' is not wrong but 'helps me relax' is more natural; 'sunrise' should be plural 'sunrises' when listing activities in general. 'During the night' is wordy—use 'at night'. Also add commas in a list. Suggestion: use 'helps me relax' and pluralize general activities (sunrises) and use 'at night'.

× For me, I prefer the views in the rural areas because we can see mountains and the greens, the color greens.

✓ For me, I prefer views in rural areas because we can see mountains and greenery, the color green.

'The rural areas' and 'the views in the rural areas' is acceptable but more natural without 'the' for general preference: 'views in rural areas'. 'The greens, the color greens' is ungrammatical and redundant. Use uncountable 'greenery' or 'the color green'. Suggestion: say 'greenery' or 'the color green' to refer to green plants generally.

× There are many greens that makes our eyes relax, our mind and our brain.

✓ There is a lot of greenery that makes our eyes, mind, and brain relax.

'Many greens that makes' mixes plural subject with singular verb: 'greens' plural requires 'make'. However 'greens' is unnatural—use 'greenery' (uncountable) with singular verb 'makes' or 'a lot of greenery that makes'. Also improve word order: 'makes our eyes, mind, and brain relax'. Suggestion: use 'greenery' or 'a lot of green plants' and ensure verb agrees with the noun.

× For me, as I've seen so many pictures in different countries, I prefer the views of different countries because it's new to me and I want to explore the beauty of other countries.

✓ For me, since I have seen so many pictures from different countries, I prefer the views of those countries because they are new to me and I want to explore their beauty.

'As I've seen' is acceptable but 'since I have seen' is clearer. 'Pictures in different countries' should be 'pictures from different countries'. 'The views of different countries' is repetitive; 'those countries' refers back to the pictures. 'It's new to me' is singular and unclear—use 'they are new to me' to refer to views (plural). 'Other countries' repeated; use 'their beauty' for conciseness. Suggestion: match pronouns and plurality (they/their) and use 'from' with 'pictures'.