Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one brief reason and a small example. Correct grammar (e.g. verb agreement, articles) and avoid repetition. Use a linking word to connect reason and example.

예시: Not really. I don't usually take many photos because I prefer enjoying the moment. For example, when I travel I focus on sightseeing rather than taking pictures, so my phone gallery is mostly empty.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds and correct vocabulary and grammar (plural/singular, articles). Mention concrete examples and explain why you prefer them.

예시: I prefer rural views because I love being close to nature. For instance, in Thailand there are mountains and waterfalls, and I enjoy hiking and listening to birds, which helps me relax.

제안: Answer directly and clearly with one main reason and a specific supporting detail. Fix pronunciation/word choice errors (county → country, auto county → other countries) and remove hesitations. Use a linking word to connect reason and example.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because they are easier to visit and I know them well. For example, I can easily travel to nearby waterfalls and mountains without planning a long trip abroad.

× Not really, because I'm not a person who like to take a picture.

✓ Not really, because I'm not a person who likes to take pictures.

The relative clause 'who like' refers to 'a person' (singular), so the verb must be third person singular 'likes' (subject-verb agreement). Also plural 'pictures' is more natural when talking about taking photos in general. Suggestion: match verb form to the singular subject and use plural for general activities (who likes to take pictures).

× So my gallery in my phone doesn't have a picture.

✓ So the gallery on my phone doesn't have any pictures.

Use the definite article 'the' to refer to a specific gallery (the one on the speaker's phone) and 'on my phone' is the usual preposition. Also 'any pictures' is more natural for indicating absence. Suggestion: use 'the' + 'on' and plural 'pictures' with 'any' for negation.

× I prefer rural area view because I like nature.

✓ I prefer rural views because I like nature.

'Rural area view' is unnatural and singular; use plural 'rural views' to refer generally to views in rural areas. 'Prefer' takes the object in plural form here. Suggestion: use 'rural views' or 'views of rural areas' for clarity.

× I like natural uh such as such as inspirance In Thailand is has mountains and waterfall.

✓ I like natural scenery, such as the mountains and waterfalls in Thailand.

Multiple issues: 'natural' needs a noun (e.g., 'natural scenery'). Remove filler 'uh' and duplicate 'such as'. 'inspirance' is incorrect; use 'scenery'. Use 'the' for specific features and plural 'waterfalls'. Also 'is has' is ungrammatical — use a simple noun phrase 'the mountains and waterfalls in Thailand.' Suggestion: say 'I like natural scenery, such as the mountains and waterfalls in Thailand.'

× I prefer view in my county rather than the auto county because I feel like I, I'm I'm able to test it, I'm able to visit it, I I can see.

✓ I prefer views in my country rather than other countries because I feel like I can visit them and see them.

Use plural 'views' to talk generally and 'country' spelling corrected. 'Auto county' seems to be 'other countries' — use that. Avoid repeated fillers ('I, I'm I'm'). Use 'can visit them and see them' to refer back to 'views' (pronoun agreement). Suggestion: simplify to 'I prefer views in my country rather than in other countries because I can visit and see them.'