Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答自然但有重复、犹豫词较多且句子不完整。建议：1) 去除填充词（uh, umm）和重复表达；2) 开头给出直接主题句，再用1–2个具体例子作为支持；3) 保持句子简洁（不超过5句）；4) 使用更准确的词汇（e.g. normal streets → everyday streets, loving → love）。示例练习：将原句改为一个清晰完整的陈述并补充具体细节和原因。

예시: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views. For example, I often photograph mountains at sunrise for their dramatic light, and I also enjoy capturing everyday streets during rainy days because reflections create interesting colors and moods.

제안: 回答表达不够流畅且结尾不完整。建议：1) 开门见山说明偏好（topic sentence）；2) 用连词（for example, because）连接理由和例子；3) 给出具体原因（lighting, architecture, atmosphere）并完成句子；4) 控制填充词，保持句子完整。

예시: I prefer photographing urban areas. For example, in big cities like Tokyo I enjoy shooting buildings at night because the artificial lights create strong contrasts and unique reflections, which make the photos more dramatic.

제안: 内容具体性不足且多次犹豫、句子结构混乱，结尾未完成。建议：1) 直接回答偏好并给出清晰理由（diversity, culture, architecture）；2) 提供具体例子并简述感受或拍摄主题；3) 使用连词保持逻辑；4) 完成句子，避免中途断句。

예시: I prefer views in other countries because they offer diverse cultures and architecture. For instance, when I visited Madrid last year I photographed landscapes, historic churches and ornate buildings, and I was fascinated by the contrast between old architecture and modern city life.

× I'm really a person that's loving to take pictures of different views such as mountains or just a normal streets or some rainy days.

✓ I'm really a person who loves taking pictures of different views such as mountains, ordinary streets, or rainy days.

原句中使用了"that's loving"，在英语中描述人的爱好应使用一般现在时动词或动名词短语（例如"love"或"love + -ing"），而不是进行时态的被动结构。此外"a normal streets"中有单复数冲突（a + plural），应改为复数或去掉冠词。改为"who loves taking"是自然的表达，"ordinary streets"比"a normal streets"更符合语法。

× And I think uh, taking photos can umm.

✓ And I think, um, taking photos can be very relaxing.

原句中缺少谓语补足内容，造成句子不完整。根据语境应补全谓语和表语，如"can be very relaxing/ enjoyable"。另外口语填充词应简化为"um"或"uh"。

× Umm, for me, I'm really lean to take photos of umm, urban areas.

✓ Umm, for me, I really lean toward taking photos of urban areas.

原句中"lean to take"搭配不自然，正确搭配为"lean toward/lean towards doing"或"prefer doing"，动词后用动名词形式。将"take photos of urban areas"改为"taking photos of urban areas"符合动词搭配。

× Uh, for example, when I travel to umm, some big city like Tokyo, I really like to take photos of the buildings at night because I think it's really.

✓ Uh, for example, when I travel to a big city like Tokyo, I really like to take photos of buildings at night because I think they're really beautiful.

原句中"some big city"应使用不定冠词"a big city"表示泛指某个大城市；"the buildings"不需要定冠词，复数名词前通常不用定冠词表示建筑总体；句尾不完整，需补充形容词如"beautiful"并使代词和先行词一致（they指代buildings）。

× I'm really, uh, I'm really a person who loves traveling all around the world, so I really prefer umm, uh, other countries.

✓ I'm really, uh, a person who loves traveling all around the world, so I really prefer other countries.

句子重复"I'm really, uh, I'm really"造成冗余，需简化。其余语法正确，但口语填充词可减少以提高清晰度。无需改变时态或动名词形式。

× Well, for example, uh, last year I traveled to, uh, Madrid, Spain and I took a lot of photos of both landscape and some architectural buildings.

✓ Well, for example, last year I traveled to Madrid, Spain, and I took a lot of photos of both landscapes and some architectural buildings.

"landscape"在此处指多幅风景照片，应使用复数"landscapes"。此外句中逗号和连词使用需清晰，改正以符合书面表达。

× Or some churches, umm, I think uh, both natural landscape and uh, some artificial buildings are very gorgeous.

✓ I also took photos of some churches. I think both natural landscapes and man-made buildings are very gorgeous.

原句用"Or"开头不合适且句子结构混乱，建议将陈述分成两句以提高可理解性。同时将"natural landscape"改为复数"natural landscapes"以对应多张照片；"artificial buildings"更自然的表达为"man-made buildings"。

× Umm, it's different from my.

✓ Umm, it's different from what I'm used to in my country.

原句末尾不完整（"different from my"缺少名词或短语作比较对象）。根据上下文应补全为"different from what I'm used to in my country"或类似结构以明确对比对象。