Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally natural and clear, with a good topic sentence and an example. To improve, shorten and refine sentences to avoid redundancy, use a linking phrase to connect idea and example, and vary vocabulary (e.g., "capture" or "photograph" instead of "take photos"). Keep within 3–4 concise sentences and correct informal contractions (avoid "'cause").

예시: I don't usually take photos of views because I prefer to experience the scenery directly. For example, when I visit mountains, I like to stand and admire the landscape for a while rather than trying to capture it with a camera.

제안: The reply is too short and does not answer the question. Provide a clear preference (urban or rural), give one or two specific reasons, and use a linking word to connect reasons. Aim for 2–3 sentences to meet Basic Structure and Content rules.

예시: I prefer rural views because I find open fields and natural landscapes more relaxing. In addition, rural areas usually have cleaner air and less noise, which makes it easier to appreciate the scenery.

제안: Good structure and balanced answer with reasons and examples. To improve, remove hesitations and minor errors ("I Bo I"), use smoother linking phrases (e.g., "on the one hand... on the other hand...") and more precise vocabulary ("mountain ranges"). Keep sentences concise and avoid repetition.

예시: I like both domestic and foreign scenery. On the one hand, China's historic sites, such as the Great Wall and the Forbidden City, are breathtaking and full of history. On the other hand, I enjoy traveling abroad to see different coastal landscapes and mountain ranges and to experience other cultures.

× Not really. In most cases I prefer to take in the view with my own eyes 'cause I enjoy sensing the beauty of nature directly.

✓ Not really. In most cases I prefer to take in the view with my own eyes because I enjoy experiencing the beauty of nature directly.

The contraction 'cause' is informal and can be unclear in a test context; replace with 'because'. Also 'sensing' is not incorrect but 'experiencing' is more natural here when talking about appreciating scenery. This is a word choice/pronoun register issue; use formal language in exam responses.

× For example, when I visit the mountains, I like to just stand and watch the scenery rather than take photos.

✓ For example, when I visit the mountains, I like to stand and watch the scenery rather than take photos.

Removing 'just' improves formality and clarity. The original is not ungrammatical but 'like to just stand' can be considered split infinitive; in formal contexts it's better to avoid splitting the infinitive.

× I have no idea.

✓ I don't really have a preference.

'I have no idea' is idiomatic but sounds abrupt and colloquial in this context. Replacing with 'I don't really have a preference' more directly answers the question and fits expected register. This is a sentence choice/structure improvement rather than pure grammar.

× Well, I Bo I like both domestic and foreign scenery.

✓ Well, I like both domestic and foreign scenery.

The fragment 'I Bo I' appears to be a speech disfluency or typo; remove the repetition. This corrects sentence structure and makes the response fluent.

× On the other hand, I enjoy visiting other countries to experience different cultures and natural scenery like coastal views or mountain range.

✓ On the other hand, I enjoy visiting other countries to experience different cultures and natural scenery like coastal views or mountain ranges.

'Mountain range' should be plural 'mountain ranges' to match 'coastal views' and to be grammatically parallel. Also 'natural scenery like coastal views or mountain ranges' uses plural for general examples. This is an article/number agreement and parallelism issue.