Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Give a direct topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct grammar, and finish your idea. Use one or two brief supporting details connected with a linking word. Practice using past and present perfect forms to talk about memories (e.g., “I have taken photos to remember places”).

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because they make me happy and help me remember special moments. For example, I often photograph sunsets and cityscapes so I can look back at them later.

제안: Begin with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, reduce filler words, and use linking words (e.g., because, moreover). Give a specific reason and one concrete example with correct grammar (use singular/plural correctly and maintain tense consistency).

예시: I prefer rural views because I feel relaxed surrounded by nature. For example, walking by a quiet river or through a forest helps me unwind and appreciate fresh air.

제안: Answer directly, avoid hesitations and repetitions, and correct word choice (e.g., “features” or “landscapes” instead of “fuel”). Provide one specific reason and an example to support your opinion. Use linking words such as because and for example.

예시: I prefer the views in my own country because China has a wide variety of landscapes. For example, I can see modern city skylines one weekend and mountains or rice terraces the next, so I rarely feel the need to travel abroad just for scenery.

× Of course I like because I think the views, different views gave us happiness and there's very a lot of views just to go there for just once or twice.

✓ Of course I like it because I think different views give us happiness, and there are many views worth visiting more than once or twice.

Multiple issues: missing object after 'like' and inappropriate clause order; tense inconsistency ('gave' should be present 'give'); incorrect phrase 'there's very a lot of views' should be 'there are many views'; awkward phrase 'just to go there for just once or twice' rephrased to 'worth visiting more than once or twice'. Suggestion: include the object after 'like' (like it), use present simple for general truths, use 'there are' with plural nouns, and use clear phrasing for frequency or recommendation.

× I think it's a good memory for me to remember them when I.

✓ I think they make good memories for me to remember.

Fragment and redundancy: sentence ends abruptly 'when I.' and uses redundant 'a good memory... to remember'. Also pronoun reference unclear. Suggestion: complete the clause or rephrase to a complete idea such as 'they make good memories for me'.

× Umm, I prefer rural areas because I think some nature, nature is the treasure, yes.

✓ Umm, I prefer rural areas because I think nature is a treasure.

Article and word choice: 'some nature' is unnatural; 'the treasure' incorrect article and countability. Use 'nature is a treasure' (no article or 'a treasure'). Suggestion: avoid 'some' with uncountable 'nature' and use 'a' for singular countable noun 'treasure' when speaking metaphorically.

× So, uh, when I go to rural areas, I will enjoy myself in the natural views.

✓ So, when I go to rural areas, I enjoy the natural scenery.

Verb tense and collocation: 'will enjoy myself' is future but general preference uses present simple 'enjoy'; 'natural views' is awkward collocation — 'natural scenery' is better. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual actions and collocations appropriate to meaning.

× And besides, I think, umm, uh, the, the, the, the forests and the river is much better for us, for me.

✓ Besides, I think the forests and the river are much better for me.

Subject-verb agreement: compound subject 'forests and the river' is plural and requires 'are' not 'is'. Also redundant fillers removed and 'for us, for me' simplified to 'for me'. Suggestion: match verb number to subject and avoid redundancy.

× I think I prefer the view in my country.

✓ I think I prefer the views in my country.

Singular/plural and article: 'the view' is too specific; context implies multiple types of views so plural 'views' fits. Suggestion: use plural when referring to various kinds of scenery.

× So it because China is a big country, it contains all kinds of fuel, all kinds of things.

✓ This is because China is a big country and contains all kinds of scenery and places.

Grammar and word choice: sentence fragment 'So it because' incorrect; 'fuel' is likely wrong word; repetition 'all kinds of things' vague. Suggestion: use 'This is because' to introduce reason, choose correct noun 'scenery' or 'places'.

× Uh, so I can, uh, enjoy all kind, I can enjoy the different kinds of view in my country, uh, include, uh, including, uh, urban, urban view or rural view.

✓ So I can enjoy different kinds of views in my country, including urban and rural scenery.

Plural and article errors and redundancy: 'all kind' should be 'different kinds of views'; remove repeated fillers and duplicated 'include/including'; use 'scenery' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: use 'including' once and ensure nouns agree in number.