Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Avoid repeating phrases like “I love taking pictures” and use linking words to connect ideas. Also vary vocabulary (e.g., “scenery,” “landscapes,” “capture”) and keep answers within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes — I enjoy photographing different views, especially when I travel. For example, I often capture beaches and mountains because they have striking colors and calm atmospheres. I also photograph food and friends to remember special moments, and I regularly review these photos to relive those experiences.

제안: Correct vocabulary errors and be more specific. Replace incorrect words ("pain") with appropriate ones ("plants," "pine trees" or "plain"). Start with a clear topic sentence, give 1–2 reasons with brief supporting details, and use a linking word like “because” or “as.”

예시: I prefer rural views because I love greenery and open spaces. For instance, many rural areas I’ve visited are covered with trees and grass, which create a peaceful atmosphere. As a result, I feel more relaxed there than in busy cities.

제안: Make your answer more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a direct statement, then give two specific reasons with brief examples. Use linking phrases like “for example” or “also” to connect points and vary vocabulary (e.g., “landscapes,” “coastlines”).

예시: I prefer the views in my own country, the Philippines, because of its diverse landscapes. For example, we have lush mountains and forests that feel very peaceful, and beautiful coastlines with world-class beaches. These varied sceneries make me proud of my country’s natural beauty.

× I prefer the views in rural areas because I really love the color green and most rural area in our country or in the places I have been are all full of pain due to the trees, the grass.

✓ I prefer the views in rural areas because I really love the color green and most rural areas in our country or in the places I have been are all full of plants because of the trees and the grass.

Issues: singular/plural (Grammar Problem Type ID 1) and article errors (ID 22) and word choice causing meaning error. 'most rural area' should be 'most rural areas' to match plural 'most'. 'are all full of pain' is incorrect word choice; likely meant 'plants' or 'greenery' and 'due to the trees, the grass' is awkward. Use 'because of the trees and the grass' for correct preposition and clearer phrasing. Suggestions: ensure nouns agree in number with determiners ('most' + plural noun), choose the correct noun ('plants' or 'greenery'), and use 'because of' to express cause.

× Not to be biased, but I prefer views in my own country, which is the Philippines.

✓ Not to be biased, but I prefer the views in my own country, the Philippines.

Issue: article/relative clause misuse (Grammar Problem Type ID 22). 'which is the Philippines' is grammatical but wordy; using an appositive 'the Philippines' after a comma is more natural. Also 'the' is required before country name 'Philippines.' Suggestion: use concise appositive structure and include the definite article for plural country names.

× And as I've mentioned earlier, I really love the color green.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, I really love the color green.

Issue: tense/word choice (Grammar Problem Type ID 6). 'I've mentioned earlier' is present perfect with 'earlier' which prefers simple past 'I mentioned earlier.' Suggestion: use simple past when referring to a specific earlier moment in the same conversation: 'As I mentioned earlier.'

× And when you visit my country, you'll see a lot of sceneries with trees, mountains.

✓ And when you visit my country, you'll see many scenic places with trees and mountains.

Issue: incorrect noun formation and collocation (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). 'sceneries' is not commonly used; 'scenic places' or 'scenery' (uncountable) is correct. Also list items should use 'and' without a trailing comma. Suggestion: use 'many scenic places' or 'a lot of scenery' and correct conjunction/word order.

× We also have the best beaches in the world.

✓ We also have some of the best beaches in the world.

Issue: strength of claim and article/quantifier use (Grammar Problem Type ID 25 and 14). Saying 'the best beaches in the world' is possible but often softened to 'some of the best beaches in the world.' Change uses quantifier 'some of' to be more natural. Suggestion: use 'some of the best' for less absolute claim.