Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and concise: give a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Use natural phrasing and correct grammar (e.g. "Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views.").

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because they help me remember places I’ve visited. For example, I often photograph city skylines at sunset to capture the colours, and looking at those pictures later helps me relax and relive the moment.

제안: Answer the question directly (state urban or rural), then give a reason with specific details and a linking word. Avoid vague pronouns and unclear phrases. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use correct grammar.

예시: I prefer rural views because they are quieter and more peaceful. For instance, I like photographing rolling hills and small lakes since the natural light and silence make the scenes feel calming.

제안: State your preference clearly and give specific reasons with linking words. Fix grammar and unclear sentences, and include a concrete example of a place or feature you like. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I prefer views in other countries, especially Australia, because of its unique landscapes and wildlife. For example, I love photographing coastal cliffs and kangaroos, which you rarely see in my home country.

× If I do, I like taking photos and I think it's a great way to make reminders and it's really fun and and make me relax and relax.

✓ If I do, I like taking photos because I think it's a great way to create reminders; it's really fun and helps me relax.

Multiple issues: redundant words and incorrect verb structure. This response shows Sentence structure errors (26) and Incorrect use of conjunctions (16). The phrase 'and and make me relax and relax' is redundant and uses a bare verb 'make' without a clear object; changing to 'helps me relax' fixes verb usage and meaning. Also 'make reminders' is awkward; 'create reminders' is more natural. Suggestions: remove duplicate words, use a clear connector like 'because', and use 'helps me relax' or 'relaxes me'.

× I prefer one of those areas.

✓ I prefer one of those areas.

This sentence is grammatically correct but ambiguous. No grammatical error per the provided list. Suggestion: clarify by specifying which area you prefer, e.g. 'I prefer rural areas' to answer the question directly.

× I think it's nice for us and honestly he is extremely relaxing.

✓ I think it's nice for us, and honestly it is extremely relaxing.

Incorrect use of pronoun and adjectives: 'he' wrongly refers to a non-human concept (should be 'it') and 'relaxing' correctly used as adjective. This falls under Incorrect use of pronouns (12) and Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs (13). Change 'he' to 'it' to match 'area' or 'place'. Also add a comma for clarity.

× Unlike the time of the planet.

✓ Unlike the hustle and bustle of the city.

This fragment is unclear and ungrammatical (Sentence structure errors, 26). 'Time of the planet' is not idiomatic English. To contrast urban and rural views, use an idiom like 'hustle and bustle of the city' or explicitly state the comparison: 'Unlike the busy city'.

× In other countries, I like Australia.

✓ In other countries, I like Australia.

Present tense is acceptable here; no change needed. The sentence is grammatical but could be improved for clarity: 'Of other countries, I like Australia most.' This relates to Present tense issue (6) if emphasis needed.

× I think it should feel slowly.

✓ I think it feels more relaxed there.

Unnatural structure and incorrect word choice (Sentence structure errors, 26). 'Should feel slowly' mixes modal 'should' with adverb 'slowly' incorrectly. To express atmosphere, use 'feels more relaxed' or 'has a slower pace'. Suggestion: use adjectives for atmosphere: 'it feels slower' or 'it has a slower pace'.

× Can you bring them from it?

✓ Can you take photos of it?

Ungrammatical and unclear (Sentence structure errors, 26). 'Bring them from it' is incorrect for photographing a place. Likely intended meaning is asking if you can photograph or bring photos back; replace with 'Can you take photos there?' or 'Can you bring photos back from there?'. Use clear verbs for intended action.

× But I think there are many animals that I like.

✓ But I think there are many animals that I like there.

Present tense is fine, but the sentence lacks a location reference; adding 'there' clarifies meaning. This is primarily a Sentence structure issue (26) but corrected by adding the adverb. Suggestion: 'I like Australia because there are many animals I like.'.