Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 発音や文法の誤りを減らし、簡潔で自然な文章構造を使う練習をしてください。具体的には、余分な繰り返し（"I I", "take, take"）を避け、動詞の原形・時制を正しく使うこと、話を一度に長く続けすぎず2〜3文で要点をまとめることを意識しましょう。また、“hold the memories”のような不自然な表現は“keep memories”や“preserve memories”に置き換えると自然です。

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I often travel to other cities or countries and take photos to preserve the memories on my phone. Later, I like to look back at these photos to remember the trips.

제안: 文法（時制や助動詞）と語彙の使い方を改善してください。現在の好みと将来の希望を分けて明確に述べる練習が必要です。例えば、“For now”の後に主語と述語をきちんと続け、将来の計画は条件節や未来表現（"when I retire"）を正しく使いましょう。また、“wanna”は口語すぎるので試験では“want to”や“would like to”を使うと良いです。

예시: At the moment, I prefer urban areas because the public transportation is convenient. However, after I retire I would like to live on an island where the environment is more peaceful.

제안: 意見を述べる際に理由をはっきり示し、具体例を加える練習をしてください。文のつなぎ（linking words）を使って論理的に話を展開することも大切です（例："because", "however", "for example"）。また、複数形・単数形や形容詞の位置など基本的な文法（"beautiful scenery" の使い方）に注意しましょう。冗長な表現を避け、2〜3文で要点と理由を述べると良いです。

예시: I prefer views in other countries because my country's cities are crowded with buildings and people, which I find messy. For example, I enjoy rural areas abroad where there are wide open landscapes and peaceful scenery.

× As I like to taking pictures of different views I I always trip to different country or area and I like to take, take and hold the memories in my phone and after I hold and after I see the picture.

✓ As I like to take pictures of different views, I always travel to different countries or areas, and I like to keep the memories on my phone, and later I look at the pictures.

The phrase 'like to taking' mixes the infinitive 'to' with a gerund; use either 'like to take' or 'like taking'. 'Trip' is a noun here; the correct verb is 'travel'. 'Different country' needs plural 'countries' or 'areas'. 'Hold the memories in my phone' is unnatural; use 'keep the memories on my phone'. Also use commas to separate clauses. Suggestion: use 'like to take' and 'travel to different countries', and replace 'hold' with 'keep' and 'see' with 'look at'.

× For now, it's. City area is good for me because the transportation is very useful. But when I retired the job, I wanna go to island.

✓ For now, the city area is good for me because the transportation is very convenient. But when I retire from my job, I want to go to an island.

'City area is' needs the definite article 'the' before 'city area'. 'Transportation is very useful' is grammatical but 'convenient' is more natural. 'When I retired the job' incorrectly uses past tense 'retired' and omits preposition; use future/plan 'when I retire from my job'. 'Wanna' is informal; use 'want to'. Also 'go to island' needs the article 'an island'. Suggestion: use correct tense and articles: 'when I retire from my job, I want to go to an island.'

× Speaking of view, I don't like my country view because there are many buildings and people and I feel like. It is messy for me and but other in other countries, especially for rural area, it's a beautiful. They are beautiful scenery.

✓ Speaking of views, I don't like the views of my country because there are many buildings and people, and I feel it is messy. But in other countries, especially in rural areas, the scenery is beautiful.

Use plural 'views' when speaking generally. 'My country view' should be 'the views of my country'. Remove the fragmented 'and I feel like.' and combine into 'and I feel it is messy.' 'Other in other countries' is redundant; use 'in other countries'. 'Rural area' should be plural 'rural areas' or 'a rural area'. 'It's a beautiful' is incomplete; say 'the scenery is beautiful'. 'They are beautiful scenery' mixes plural pronoun with uncountable noun; use 'the scenery is beautiful'. Suggestion: use plural nouns and complete clauses: 'the scenery is beautiful'.