Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve clarity and grammar, use a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Avoid repetition and fix pronoun errors (use 'you' vs 'myself'). Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, 'because' or 'so'). Keep the answer to no more than 3–4 sentences and be specific about what kinds of views you like and why.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because each scene reveals a unique kind of beauty. For example, coastal sunsets highlight warm colors while cityscapes show interesting shapes and lights. Photographing varied views helps me notice details I would otherwise miss.

제안: Correct grammar and word choice, and make your reasons more specific. Use linking words (such as 'because' and 'for example') and avoid awkward phrases like 'being a such big city.' Limit to 2–3 sentences: state preference, give reason, and one example.

예시: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the architecture and vibrant night scenes. For example, skyscrapers with illuminated windows and neon signs look spectacular after dark and create an energetic atmosphere.

제안: Reduce hesitation and filler words, and improve grammar (e.g., 'historical architecture' not 'architectures'). Start with a direct topic sentence, then explain specifically what historic sites you like and why. Use one linking phrase like 'because' or 'for example'.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because I love historical architecture. For example, visiting old temples and colonial buildings allows me to appreciate their craftsmanship and learn about our cultural heritage.

× Yes I like taking pictures of different views cause different views give us different angle of beauty which help us to develop yourself like have a new angle to look at yourself.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because different views give us different angles of beauty, which help us to develop ourselves and gain a new perspective on ourselves.

Errors: 'cause' is informal and should be 'because' (Incorrect conjunction). 'angle' should be plural 'angles' to agree with 'different' (Singular and plural issue). 'help us to develop yourself' mixes pronouns; use 'help us to develop ourselves' (Incorrect use of pronouns). 'like have a new angle to look at yourself' is ungrammatical and informal; rewrite as 'gain a new perspective on ourselves' to correct sentence structure and maintain consistent pronouns (Sentence structure errors). Suggestions: use 'because' in formal speech, match plural forms with modifiers, keep pronouns consistent (we/us/ourselves), and rephrase awkward clauses into clear expressions like 'gain a new perspective'.

× Well, I actually prefer views in urban areas. I like all the sky rise building and I especially enjoy to see the night view of the modern city.

✓ Well, I actually prefer views in urban areas. I like all the skyscrapers and I especially enjoy seeing the night view of the modern city.

Errors: 'sky rise building' is incorrect word formation and singular; correct is 'skyscrapers' (Singular and plural issue and incorrect word form). 'enjoy to see' is incorrect verb pattern; after 'enjoy' use gerund 'seeing' (Verb + -ing form). Suggestions: use correct noun 'skyscrapers' for tall urban buildings and follow 'enjoy' with '-ing' form: 'enjoy seeing'.

× It makes me very exciting, like being a such big city.

✓ It makes me very excited, as if I were in such a big city.

Errors: 'makes me very exciting' uses 'exciting' (active) but should use 'excited' (adjective describing feeling) (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs). 'being a such big city' is ungrammatical: 'being in such a big city' or better 'as if I were in such a big city' to express the experience (Sentence structure errors). Suggestions: use 'excited' to describe a person's emotion, and use 'in' with 'city' or conditional 'as if I were in...'. Also note subjunctive 'were' is natural for hypothetical feeling.

× I actually prefer the views in my own country to be honest. I'm a big fan of history. Uh, I really enjoy to look at like the very historical architectures in my home country, umm.

✓ I actually prefer the views in my own country, to be honest. I'm a big fan of history. I really enjoy looking at the very historical buildings in my home country.

Errors: 'to be honest' should be set off by commas for clarity (Sentence structure). 'I really enjoy to look at' uses incorrect verb pattern; after 'enjoy' use gerund 'looking at' (Verb + -ing form). 'the very historical architectures' is incorrect collocation; use 'historical buildings' or 'architectural landmarks' (Incorrect use of adjectives or nouns / word choice). Suggestions: use commas for parenthetical phrases, use gerunds after 'enjoy', and choose correct noun collocations like 'historical buildings' or 'architectural landmarks'.