Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid minor grammar errors, and add one specific supporting detail with a linking word. Also keep within 3–4 sentences. Correct singular/plural and use possessive structures correctly.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I’m especially fond of mountains, so I often visit nearby ranges and photograph sunsets and sweeping valleys on my phone. For example, last month I captured a vivid sunrise that highlighted the ridgelines.

제안: Improve grammar and coherence: begin with a direct topic sentence, use linking words (because, so) and correct verb forms and articles. Provide one or two specific examples or reasons and avoid repetition. Keep it under five sentences.

예시: I prefer rural views because they remind me of my childhood in Shahjahanpur. When I visit from the city, the landscapes and small village scenes bring back many memories, so I like photographing old houses, fields and local festivals. For instance, I often take pictures of mustard fields at dawn because they look very atmospheric.

제안: Be concise and structured: state your preference clearly, explain reasons with linking words, correct grammar (e.g. 'so far' not 'till yet'), and finish the thought. Mention a specific place and what you would photograph there.

예시: I would prefer to see views in other countries, but so far I haven’t traveled abroad. India already offers diverse scenery—mountains, beaches and big cities—so I can capture many interesting scenes at home. If I had the chance, I would visit Canada to photograph its lakes and autumn forests, especially around Banff National Park.

× Yes, I love taking picture of different views.

✓ Yes, I love taking pictures of different views.

The noun 'picture' should be plural ('pictures') because 'taking' implies making multiple photographs of different views. Use plural nouns when referring to more than one or a general activity involving multiple items. Suggestion: Use 'pictures' when speaking about photographs in general.

× Actually I am a mountain lover and I visit mountains to collect good views from my phone.

✓ Actually I am a mountain lover and I visit mountains to collect good views on my phone.

The preposition 'from' is incorrect here (see preposition errors) and 'on my phone' is the natural collocation. The main grammar issue is preposition choice; the activity is ongoing/habitual so present simple 'visit' is fine. Suggestion: Use 'on my phone' when referring to photos stored or viewed on a device.

× I prefer capturing rural areas views as it connects me with my old time as I belongs from a village named Shahjahanpur.

✓ I prefer capturing views of rural areas because it connects me with my past since I am from a village called Shahjahanpur.

Multiple issues: 'rural areas views' has incorrect word order and pluralization (should be 'views of rural areas'); 'it connects me with my old time' is unnatural — use 'connects me with my past'; 'I belongs' is wrong pronoun/verb agreement and form — should be 'I am from'. This correction addresses pronoun and verb agreement and noun phrase order. Suggestion: Use 'views of rural areas', 'connects me with my past', and 'I am from' for correct structure.

× So when I go there from a metro city it it hits me with a lots of memories which makes me feel like how far I came from that place and it connects me with my old memory.

✓ So when I go there from a metro city it hits me with a lot of memories, which makes me think about how far I have come from that place and connects me with my old memories.

Errors: 'it it' duplicate word; 'a lots' should be 'a lot of' or 'lots of'; 'makes me feel like how far I came' is ungrammatical and tense is wrong — use present perfect 'have come' to show distance from past to present; 'old memory' should be plural 'old memories'. Also comma needed before the relative clause. Suggestion: Remove duplicate words, use 'a lot of memories', 'think about', and present perfect 'have come'.

× So I love taking picture of rural areas and.

✓ So I love taking pictures of rural areas.

Ends with an extra 'and' and 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' because the activity involves multiple photos. Remove trailing conjunction. Suggestion: Say 'taking pictures of rural areas' and avoid dangling conjunctions.

× I prefer views of other countries but till yet I have not visited any other country as I'm citizen of India and it has a several views like we can go on mountains, beaches or a city or a metropolitan city.

✓ I prefer views of other countries, but so far I have not visited any because I am a citizen of India, and my country also has many sights: mountains, beaches, cities, and metropolitan areas.

Problems: 'till yet' is incorrect — use 'so far' or 'yet'; 'as I'm citizen of India' needs article and verb: 'I am a citizen of India'; 'it has a several views' incorrect article and quantifier — use 'many sights' or 'many views'; 'go on mountains' should be 'go to mountains' or 'visit mountains'; wordiness and parallelism need fixing. Suggestion: Use 'so far', 'I am a citizen of India', 'many sights', and 'visit mountains'.

× So we can capture a lot from us in from our own country too.

✓ So we can capture a lot in our own country too.

'from us in from our own country' is ungrammatical and misuses pronouns/prepositions. The intended meaning is that we can take many photos within our own country — use 'in our own country' and drop 'from us'. Suggestion: Say 'capture a lot in our own country'.

× But if I get a chance I would like to go Canada and.

✓ But if I get a chance, I would like to go to Canada.

Missing preposition 'to' before 'Canada' and trailing 'and' should be removed. Conditional phrasing 'would like to go to Canada' is correct for a hypothetical future. Suggestion: Use 'go to [country]' and avoid dangling conjunctions.