Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, sentence structure and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct verb forms and articles, and avoid redundant phrases. Keep answer within 2–3 concise sentences and add a brief specific detail or example. Use linking words if you add extra information.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views when I travel. For example, last month I photographed a mountain sunrise and saved several shots on my phone because the colors were stunning.

제안: Focus on a clear direct answer and avoid filler words. Correct collocations (e.g., 'rural areas', 'natural environment', 'fresh air') and finish your thought—explain what rural areas help you realize. Provide one or two specific supporting details using a linking word (e.g., 'because' or 'for example').

예시: I prefer rural areas because I can breathe fresh air and enjoy the natural environment. For example, when I visit the countryside I like walking by farms and listening to birds, which helps me relax and feel refreshed.

제안: Answer directly and avoid vague phrases like 'you know' and repetition. Use correct sentence order and articles (e.g., 'My country is a famous travel destination'). Give a specific reason and a brief example or plan. Keep it concise and natural.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because it has many famous destinations and varied landscapes. For instance, I plan to visit the coastal cliffs and national parks this year to enjoy different sea and mountain views.

× I really love take photo in different views when I travel everywhere, I often shape this view in my phone.

✓ I really love taking photos of different views when I travel everywhere; I often save these photos on my phone.

The verb 'love' should be followed by the -ing form 'taking' (Grammar Problem Type ID 8). 'Photo' should be plural 'photos' (singular/plural issue, ID 1). Use the correct preposition 'of' after 'photos' (preposition issue, ID 11). 'Shape this view in my phone' is incorrect: likely intended 'save these photos on my phone' — 'save' is the correct verb and 'on my phone' is the correct preposition. Suggestions: use 'love + -ing' structures, match noun number to meaning, and choose appropriate verbs and prepositions for actions with devices. Grammar Problem Type ID: 8,1,11

× I love to enjoy our rural area because, uh, in, in this, in, in this place, I can enjoy fresh air and see the natural in environment by my eyes. And I think, uh, rural areas often help me realize.

✓ I love enjoying rural areas because in those places I can enjoy the fresh air and see nature with my own eyes. I also think rural areas often help me relax.

'Love to enjoy' is acceptable but 'love enjoying' is more natural; this involves verb + -ing (ID 8). 'Our rural area' is odd; use 'rural areas' or 'those places' (singular/plural and pronoun choice, IDs 1 and 12). Remove repeated filler 'in, in this'. Use 'the fresh air' (definite article, ID 17). 'See the natural in environment' is incorrect: use 'see nature' or 'see the natural environment' (adjective/noun order and article, IDs 13 and 17). 'By my eyes' should be 'with my own eyes' (preposition and pronoun, IDs 11 and 12). The final clause 'help me realize' is incomplete; likely 'help me relax' or 'help me realize things'—choose 'help me relax' to fit context. Suggestions: avoid repetitions, use correct prepositions ('in', 'with'), choose precise nouns ('nature'), and complete verbs/objects for clarity. Grammar Problem Type ID: 11,12,17,8

× You know, in my country is very famous travel destination, so I really enjoy my own country and I want to travel around my country and enjoy the fresh air in in everywhere.

✓ You know, my country is a very famous travel destination, so I really enjoy it and I want to travel around my country and enjoy the fresh air everywhere.

The original lacks a proper subject-verb order: 'in my country is' should be 'my country is' (sentence structure, ID 26). 'Very famous travel destination' needs the indefinite article 'a' (article errors, ID 22). Repeating 'my country' is acceptable but 'enjoy it' avoids repetition (pronoun use, ID 12). 'Enjoy the fresh air in in everywhere' has double 'in' and incorrect preposition 'in' before 'everywhere' — use 'everywhere' without a preposition (preposition error, ID 11). Suggestions: place subject before verb, use articles before countable singular nouns, avoid repeated words and unnecessary prepositions. Grammar Problem Type ID: 22,26,11,12