Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cần rõ ràng hơn, tránh lỗi từ vựng gây hiểu lầm (ví dụ 'meals' thay vì 'views'), giảm tiếng ngập ngừng, và tổ chức câu theo cấu trúc: câu chủ đề + 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể. Dùng liên từ (for example, because, so) để liên kết ý và giữ độ dài tối đa 5 câu.

예시: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views because I enjoy capturing beautiful scenes. For example, I often photograph sunsets over the beach and the skyline in my local park. I take these photos to remember the mood and colours of each place.

제안: Cần trả lời trực tiếp (urban or rural) và sử dụng cấu trúc rõ ràng; sửa ngữ pháp (thời, chủ ngữ, tính từ) và loại bỏ ngập ngừng. Thêm 1–2 lý do cụ thể và kết hợp liên từ (because, so) để mạch lạc hơn.

예시: I prefer rural views because I grew up in my father's hometown near the mountains and the beach. The scenery there is more beautiful and the air is fresher, so I feel much more relaxed when I visit.

제안: Câu trả lời tốt về ý tưởng nhưng cần chỉnh ngữ pháp và cụ thể hóa: nêu một ví dụ hoặc so sánh ngắn giữa trong nước và nước ngoài. Dùng liên từ (however, for instance) để làm rõ ý và giữ độ dài hợp lý.

예시: I enjoy views in both my own country and abroad because each place has its own appeal. For instance, my country offers familiar landscapes and traditions, but other countries provide different architectures and cultures that I want to explore.

× Yes, I really love taking pictures of different meals, you know, every since umm in the world, umm is very breathtaking.

✓ Yes, I really love taking pictures of different views around the world; they are very breathtaking.

Original uses 'meals' instead of 'views' (wrong noun) and has ungrammatical phrase 'every since umm in the world, umm is very breathtaking.' The sentence needs a clear subject and verb agreement: 'views... they are very breathtaking.' Suggestion: use correct noun 'views', simplify the phrase to 'around the world', and ensure subject-verb agreement by using 'they are'.

× So I really want to keep some photos of these things and uh, you know like the sky in the park or the mountains or the beach.

✓ So I really want to keep some photos of these scenes, like the sky in the park, the mountains, or the beach.

Original is conversational with filler words and an imprecise noun 'things'. Improve clarity by using 'scenes' and parallel noun phrases separated by commas. Remove fillers and ensure consistent list formatting.

× I prefer living in the I've been every years because in Dad's place that seems very beautiful with mountain or beach.

✓ I prefer living in the place I have been to for years because my dad's area is very beautiful, with mountains and beaches.

Original sentence is fragmented and ungrammatical: 'I prefer living in the I've been every years' mixes clauses incorrectly. Correct by reordering: 'the place I have been to for years' and use plural nouns 'mountains and beaches' and possessive 'my dad's area.' Maintain present perfect 'have been' for duration and plural agreement.

× Umm. Another reason is that the air in that area very fresh and I have a relaxed.

✓ Another reason is that the air in that area is very fresh and I feel relaxed.

Missing verb 'is' for 'air... is very fresh' and incorrect phrase 'I have a relaxed.' Use 'I feel relaxed' to express a state. Ensure subject-verb presence and correct adjective/adverb usage.

× Oh for me, I love both my own country or another country because I think all of them have strengths and I want to travel and know all the culture of them.

✓ Oh, for me, I love both my own country and other countries because I think each of them has strengths, and I want to travel and learn about their cultures.

Original uses 'both... or' which should be 'both... and' (conjunction error) and 'another country' mismatches with 'both'. Also 'all of them have strengths' is awkward—use 'each of them has strengths' and 'know all the culture of them' is incorrect; use 'learn about their cultures.' Use plural 'countries' to match 'both' and 'their' for possession.