Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce hesitation and repetition, correct grammar, and keep answers concise (max 5 sentences). Use a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details with linking words. For example, say why you like photography, then give one concrete example and avoid filler words like “uh.”

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos because they help me remember special places and moments. For instance, I experiment with angles and lighting; I often shoot landscapes during the golden hour to capture warm tones.

제안: Answer directly with a clear choice or balanced opinion, reduce hesitations and correct sentence structure. Use linking words to explain reasons and give a specific example. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: It depends on my mood and company, but I generally prefer rural views for peace and urban views for interesting architecture. For example, I enjoy quiet countryside mornings for landscapes, whereas cities offer vibrant street scenes and unique buildings.

제안: Fix pronunciation and grammar (e.g., “I prefer rural” → “I prefer views in other countries”), remove hesitation, and add a clear topic sentence followed by a specific example. Use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because I love discovering different landscapes and cultures. For example, the coastal scenery in Spain felt very different from back home, with dramatic cliffs and vivid colors that inspired my photography.

× Yes, I like uh to I like taking photos because, uh, they help me remember more memorable places and special moments.

✓ Yes, I like taking photos because they help me remember memorable places and special moments.

The sentence contains redundancy and an unnecessary infinitive marker 'to' after 'like'. Also 'more memorable' is redundant with 'memorable'; use just 'memorable'. Suggestion: remove the extraneous 'to I like' and choose a single adjective form: 'memorable'.

× I also experimenting uh, with different Angel and lighting, for example, shooting landscape during the golden hour to get warm tones.

✓ I also experiment with different angles and lighting; for example, I shoot landscapes during the golden hour to get warm tones.

The original uses 'experimenting' without an auxiliary verb, creating a sentence fragment. Change to the base form 'experiment' to match present simple 'I also experiment' or add an auxiliary ('I am experimenting'). Also 'Angel' is a misspelling of 'angle' and 'shooting landscape' should be pluralized to 'shoot landscapes' or 'shooting landscapes'. Suggestion: use correct verb form and spellings and keep consistent tense.

× It depends on my mood or who, who I'm with.

✓ It depends on my mood or who I am with.

The repeated 'who' is a hesitation; remove duplication. Use full form 'I am' rather than contraction 'I'm' for clarity if desired, but 'I'm' is acceptable. The main correction is removing the extra 'who'.

× Uh, I think both of that, uh, urban, rural and rural air, uh, they all, they are have their own unique building.

✓ I think both urban and rural areas have their own unique buildings.

Several issues: 'both of that' is incorrect for two categories; use 'both urban and rural areas'. 'Rural air' is incorrect; 'areas' needed. 'They all, they are have' mixes pronouns and auxiliary verbs; use simple present 'have'. Also 'building' should be plural 'buildings' to match 'areas'. Suggestion: simplify the clause to 'both urban and rural areas have their own unique buildings.'

× So, umm, maybe like.

✓ So, maybe.

This fragment 'maybe like' is an informal filler without a verb or object. Remove 'like' to form a short, grammatically correct response: 'So, maybe.' If elaboration is needed, complete the thought.

× Yes, uh, I refer rails in other country because I love discovering different landscape and cultures.

✓ Yes, I prefer rural areas in other countries because I love discovering different landscapes and cultures.

Multiple errors: 'refer rails' seems to be a mispronunciation; likely 'prefer rural areas' is intended. 'In other country' needs plural 'countries' or 'another country' and preposition 'in' is fine but 'in other countries' better. 'Landscape' should be plural 'landscapes' to match 'cultures'. This correction fixes verb choice 'prefer' (first person present) and pluralization.

× For example, I enjoy the coastal scenery. When I visited Spain it felt very different from scenery back home.

✓ For example, I enjoy the coastal scenery. When I visited Spain, it felt very different from the scenery back home.

Missing definite article before 'scenery back home' — use 'the scenery back home' to refer to a specific set of scenery. Also add a comma after the introductory clause 'When I visited Spain'. Tense usage is fine (visited = past) and 'felt' matches. Suggestion: include 'the' and punctuation for clarity.