Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Сократите и структурируйте ответ: начните с прямого утверждения, затем добавьте 1–2 конкретных деталей и закончите коротким объяснением причины. Избегайте повторов, ошибок с временами и лишних слов. Используйте связку для ясности (for example, because). Стремитесь к 2–4 предложениям общего объёма.

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. I especially like taking pictures of nature and city skyscrapers; I started when I was about ten. Photography helps me relax and express myself because I can capture moments I find beautiful.

제안: Начните с чёткого ответа (urban or rural), затем приведите 1–2 конкретные причины, избегая разговорных вставок и повторов. Используйте связующие слова (because, while, however) и проверьте артикли и порядок слов. Держите 2–3 предложения чёткими и грамматически правильными.

예시: I prefer urban views rather than rural ones because I grew up in a city and feel more comfortable there. Urban scenes also offer interesting architecture and vibrant street life, which I like to photograph.

제안: Ответьте прямо, затем сравните две опции с ясными примерами. Избегайте бессвязных фраз и ошибок в названиях; используйте правильную лексику (for example, beautiful coastline, mountains). Дайте 2–3 предложения с чёткой логикой и конкретными примерами мест.

예시: I appreciate views both in my country and abroad. For example, at home we have beautiful natural landscapes, while in other countries like Turkey you can see famous sights such as the Bosphorus, and places like Switzerland are great for mountain scenery.

× I'm a big fan of taking pictures of nature and some skyscrapers or landscapes where this I started to take my picture when I used to be 12 or 10 and it's one of my hobbies which are help me to be myself.

✓ I'm a big fan of taking pictures of nature and of skyscrapers and landscapes. I started taking pictures when I was about 10 or 12, and it's one of my hobbies that helps me be myself.

The sentence misuses verb forms and relative clauses. Use the gerund 'taking' after 'started' (Grammar Problem Type 8) and 'helps' should be third person singular present (Grammar Problem Type 2). Also simplify the relative clause: 'a hobby that helps me be myself.' Use 'was' for past state (Grammar Problem Type 5). Suggestions: break long run-on sentence into shorter sentences, use 'started taking' and 'helps'. (Explanation in English as requested.)

× I used to be 12 or 10 and it's one of my hobbies which are help me to be myself.

✓ I was about 10 or 12, and it's one of my hobbies that helps me be myself.

'Are help' is incorrect because 'hobby' is singular and requires a singular verb 'helps' (Grammar Problem Type 2 and 27). Also 'which' is better replaced by 'that' for defining clauses. Suggestion: use 'that helps' and match singular subject and verb.

× Uh, beef be honest way.

✓ Uh, to be honest,

This fragment is ungrammatical and seems to attempt the phrase 'to be honest.' It's a sentence structure error (Grammar Problem Type 26). Suggestion: use the idiomatic expression 'to be honest' at the start of the sentence.

× I more prefer urban areas while most of my other friends prefer a rural areas.

✓ I prefer urban areas more, while most of my friends prefer rural areas.

'More prefer' is not standard; use 'prefer ... more' or just 'prefer.' Also 'a rural areas' mixes singular article with plural noun; remove 'a' (Grammar Problem Type 14 and 1). Suggestion: say 'prefer urban areas' and 'prefer rural areas'.

× But for me urban areas is more comfortable because it helps me because I am a human who grows in the urban and urban was every every time part of my part of my life.

✓ But for me urban areas are more comfortable because I grew up in the city and urban life has always been part of my life.

'Urban areas' is plural and requires 'are' not 'is' (Grammar Problem Type 27). 'Grows in the urban' is incorrect tense and form; use past 'grew up in the city' (Grammar Problem Type 5 and 6). Remove repetition and use 'has always been part of my life.' Suggestion: use correct subject-verb agreement and proper past tense 'grew up'.

× University I suggest has Bosphorus in another country and my contrast are also because my country is castle somewhere is the best nature landscapes are located.

✓ For example, the Bosphorus is in another country, and there are other places; in my country there are beautiful natural landscapes.

The original sentence misuses pronouns and demonstratives ('University I suggest') and has unclear references (Grammar Problem Type 12). It also has article and noun phrase errors. Suggestion: use clear subjects like 'For example' and refer properly to 'the Bosphorus' and 'my country'.

× However, we have another countries where is also our nature for temple Switzerland and both of them are.

✓ However, we also have other countries with beautiful nature, for example Switzerland; both are great.

This sentence is ungrammatical and incomplete; word order and omitted verbs create confusion (Grammar Problem Type 26). Suggestion: restructure: 'we also have other countries with beautiful nature, for example Switzerland; both are great.'