Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh), correct grammar (visit → visiting places, taking a picture), and give one specific supporting detail. Keep to 2–4 sentences and use linking words for coherence.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often photograph religious sites like the local Gurdwara and notable halls in my city because their architecture is interesting. Recently I took a picture of my bike with the Gurdwara in the background to capture the contrast between modern and traditional elements.

제안: Answer directly then give one clear reason with a specific example. Avoid repetition and unclear words (e.g., 'vent many and many places'). Use linking words (because, so) and check verb forms (used to visit). Limit to 2–4 sentences.

예시: I prefer urban views because my state has many cities with varied architecture and busy streets. For instance, I like photographing city markets and modern buildings since they offer colorful scenes and candid street moments.

제안: Make the response grammatical and concise: state preference clearly, give a reason and a brief example. Avoid wordiness and repetitions ('different different', 'too much happy'). Use linking words (because, so) to connect ideas.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because I feel more familiar with the culture and places here. For example, I enjoy photographing historic sites and festivals at home since they are easier to access and have personal meaning to me.

× Definitely, I like to take pictures of different views such as visiting to Gurdwara and many other places like a hall in our own city.

✓ Definitely, I like taking pictures of different views, such as visiting the Gurdwara and other places like a hall in our city.

Use of gerund 'taking' after 'like' is more natural than 'to take' in this context (Verb + -ing form). Also, remove unnecessary preposition 'to' after 'visiting' and use the definite article 'the' before a specific place name like 'Gurdwara'. Combine clauses for clarity.

× So uh, it was a moment when I was taking picture of my bike, uh, with standing background of my.

✓ There was a moment when I was taking a picture of my bike with a standing background behind it.

Original sentence lacks articles and has awkward structure. Add article 'a' before 'picture' and 'standing background' needs context; 'behind it' clarifies possession. Reordering improves sentence flow (Sentence structure errors).

× I prefer to take views in urban areas because in my own state there are more urban areas rather than rural areas and I also used to vent many and many places in another area to visit and to take some pictures and making memories in my daily life.

✓ I prefer urban views because my state has more urban areas than rural ones, and I often visit many different places to take pictures and make memories in my daily life.

Use simple present for general preferences ('prefer' and 'has'). Replace 'rather than' with 'than' for comparison. 'Used to' implies past habit, but the intended meaning is present habit so use 'often visit'. Use infinitive 'to take' and base form 'make' after 'and' to maintain parallel structure (Present tense issue and Sentence structure errors).

× As I am my not fond of visiting other countries but I am too much happy to take pictures and to take views by visiting different different places in my own country.

✓ I am not fond of visiting other countries, but I am very happy to take pictures and enjoy the views when visiting different places in my own country.

Remove extraneous pronoun 'my' and fix word order 'I am not fond'. Replace 'too much happy' with 'very happy'. Use 'enjoy the views' for natural phrasing and avoid repeating 'different'. Correct pronoun and adjective/adverb usage for clarity (Incorrect use of pronouns and Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs).