Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer grammatically correct, more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct countable noun and verb forms, and avoid awkward phrasing like "relax me." Add one specific detail (what you photograph or where) using a linking word.

예시: Yes, I do. Photographing landscapes is my favorite hobby. For example, on my days off I often walk to the riverbank to take pictures of sunrise and mist because it helps me relax and clear my mind.

제안: Answer directly and correct grammar errors. Use a clear topic sentence (I prefer urban views) and give a specific reason with a linking word. Replace informal phrasing like "I've the city works" and "so obsessed" with natural alternatives.

예시: I prefer urban views because I enjoy watching how the city functions. For instance, I like photographing busy streets and markets since the movement of people and architecture tells stories about daily life.

제안: Be concise and use more natural vocabulary. Start with a direct statement, then give a specific reason and an example or brief emotion. Replace vague phrases like "this is my land" with "my home country" and "resonate with it" with "feel connected."

예시: I prefer views in my own country because I feel more connected to its landscapes and traditions. For example, photographing local festivals and countryside scenes reminds me of my childhood and gives me a sense of comfort.

× Yes, that's actually my favorite activities.

✓ Yes, that's actually my favorite activity.

'Favorite' is followed by a singular noun when referring to one thing; 'activity' should be singular to agree with 'that's' (that is). Change 'activities' to 'activity' for correct singular-plural agreement.

× I usually go out taking pictures of the scenic views on my day off and I think that's the best way to relax me.

✓ I usually go out to take pictures of scenic views on my day off, and I think that's the best way to relax.

After 'go out' the infinitive 'to take' is more natural than the gerund 'taking' in this context. Also 'scenic views' does not need 'the' and 'relax me' is incorrect; use 'relax' (intransitive) to mean become relaxed. Combine clauses with a comma before 'and.'

× Actually, I prefer views in urban area because I like the way I've the city works and I am so obsessed with observing how people struggle to be better in this bustling city.

✓ Actually, I prefer views in urban areas because I like the way the city works, and I am so obsessed with observing how people struggle to improve in this bustling city.

Use 'in urban areas' (plural) to refer generally to urban settings. Remove 'I've' which is incorrect here; use 'the city works.' Add a comma before 'and.' Replace 'struggle to be better' with 'struggle to improve' for natural phrasing. Also keep consistent plural 'areas.'

× Actually, I prefer views in urban area because I like the way I've the city works and I am so obsessed with observing how people struggle to be better in this bustling city.

✓ Actually, I prefer views in urban areas because I like the way the city works, and I am so obsessed with observing how people strive to improve in this bustling city.

'Urban area' should be plural 'urban areas' when speaking generally. Also 'strive to improve' is a more idiomatic phrase than 'struggle to be better.' This fixes number agreement and improves word choice.

× I prefer views in my own country because this is my land and this is the culture I'm familiar with and I think every time I look into this lovely place I can always resonate with it.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because this is my land and this is the culture I'm familiar with, and I think every time I look at this lovely place I can always feel a connection with it.

Use 'look at' instead of 'look into' for viewing a place. 'Resonate with' is typically used differently; 'feel a connection with' is clearer. Add a comma before 'and.' Maintain present tense but use more natural verbs for clarity.