Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more fluent and concise. Begin with a clear topic sentence, reduce hesitations and filler words, and correct minor grammar (e.g., “I like taking pictures” not “I'd like taking”). Add one specific detail about what you enjoy photographing and why, using a linking word to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I always carry my A1 camera when I travel, so I can capture landscapes and cityscapes; for example, I like photographing sunsets because the colours change quickly and look dramatic in photos.

제안: Make a direct statement and support it with specific reasons. Remove repetition and fillers, and use linking words (e.g., “because”, “for example”). Provide concrete descriptive vocabulary (e.g., “rolling hills”, “mountain valleys”) rather than vague phrases.

예시: I prefer photographing the countryside because the landscapes are more varied and peaceful. For example, I enjoy capturing rolling hills and mountain valleys where rivers meander, which creates interesting natural patterns in my images.

제안: Answer directly and confidently. Correct pronunciation and avoid hesitation. Give specific examples of places or types of views in your country and use a linking phrase (e.g., “because”, “for instance”) to explain why you prefer them.

예시: I prefer taking pictures in my own country, Japan, because it has many historical sites and diverse natural scenery. For instance, I love photographing temples in Kyoto and coastal cliffs in Hokkaido, which both offer unique textures and colours for photos.

× Uh, yes, I'd like taking pictures of uh, different, umm, views.

✓ Uh, yes, I'd like to take pictures of different views.

After 'would like' use the infinitive 'to' + base verb, not the -ing form. Use 'I'd like to take' instead of 'I'd like taking'. Suggestion: Practice sentences with 'would like to' followed by verbs, e.g., 'I'd like to travel.'

× I actually have A1 camera with me and uh, whenever I go somewhere on uh, trips, I take some photos and pass them on Instagram.

✓ I actually have a camera with me, and whenever I go on trips I take photos and post them on Instagram.

Use the indefinite article 'a' before a singular countable noun ('a camera'). 'A1' seems incorrect. 'Go on trips' is the correct prepositional phrase. 'Pass them on Instagram' is unnatural; use 'post them on Instagram'. Suggestion: Check articles before countable nouns and common collocations like 'post on Instagram.'

× Well, I rather prefer to, I'd rather take pictures of the countryside to be honest.

✓ Well, I'd rather take pictures of the countryside, to be honest.

Redundant phrasing 'I rather prefer to, I'd rather' is incorrect. Use one construction: 'I'd rather' or 'I prefer to'. Also place commas properly. Suggestion: Use either 'I prefer to' or 'I'd rather' to express preference, not both together.

× Uh, just because, umm, you know, the, some of the views are very beautiful as it, for example, meanders through the mountains and uh, like those kind of conditions.

✓ Just because some of the views are very beautiful, for example, they meander through the mountains.

Pronoun use and sentence structure are confused. 'Some of the views' is plural, so use plural pronoun 'they' not 'it'. 'Meander' is used for plural subject as 'they meander'. Remove filler words and unclear phrase 'like those kind of conditions.' Suggestion: Keep subject and pronoun number consistent and simplify the sentence: 'Some views meander through the mountains.'

× Umm, eye leather, umm, take pictures of the, uh, ones in my country, uh, in Japan, there are so many uh, historical places and uh, beautiful, umm, natural conditions.

✓ Um, I prefer to take pictures in my country. In Japan there are many historical places and beautiful natural landscapes.

Pronoun 'eye leather' seems to be mispronounced; correct is 'I prefer to'. 'Ones' is vague; use 'in my country' or 'there'. 'Natural conditions' is awkward; 'natural landscapes' is more natural. Also split into two sentences for clarity. Suggestion: Use clear verbs for preference ('prefer to') and common collocations like 'natural landscapes'.

× Therefore it would, I think it's more suitable for taking pictures, I guess.

✓ Therefore, I think it is more suitable for taking pictures.

Unnecessary fragments and mixed tense/modal constructions. Use a simple present opinion: 'I think it is more suitable for taking pictures.' Remove 'would' and 'I guess' redundancy. Suggestion: Express opinions with clear present-tense structures: 'I think it is...' or add 'I guess' at end if needed but avoid both together.