Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it has some grammatical errors, repetition and lacks variety in vocabulary and specific detail. Improve by using a concise topic sentence, correct grammar, and one or two specific examples with linking words. Keep answers to up to five sentences.

예시: Yes, I do. I especially enjoy photographing mountain landscapes and natural scenes because I like capturing dramatic light and textures. For example, I often hike to a ridge at sunrise to photograph the mist over valleys, and I sometimes use a wide-angle lens to include both foreground details and distant peaks.

제안: The response communicates a preference but is wordy and contains filler words and awkward phrasing. Make a clear topic sentence, give specific reasons and use linking words (because, therefore, for example). Avoid hesitation sounds and repeat ideas only once.

예시: I prefer rural views because they offer unique natural scenery and a sense of peace. For example, rural areas have rolling hills and quiet rivers that contrast with noisy city streets, so I find them more relaxing and photogenic.

제안: Good content but a little general and repetitive. Provide a direct topic sentence, a clear reason, and a specific example to make your answer more convincing. Use varied vocabulary (prefer, mainly, because, for instance).

예시: I mainly prefer views in my own country because I enjoy exploring its diverse landscapes and culture. For instance, I like visiting coastal towns and historic cities at weekends, which lets me photograph traditional architecture and local festivals that I can't find elsewhere.

× Yes definitely. I love taking pictures of difference in views such as I love to take pictures of mountains and the nature related things.

✓ Yes, definitely. I love taking pictures of different views, for example mountains and other nature-related subjects.

The student used 'difference in views' which is incorrect; the adjective 'different' should modify 'views' (problem: incorrect use of adjectives). Also 'the nature related things' is awkward; use 'nature-related subjects' or 'natural scenes'. Combine clauses with a clearer connector like 'for example'. Suggestion: use 'different' before the noun, hyphenate compound adjectives (nature-related), and simplify the phrase structure.

× Honestly I prioritise views in rural areas because there's unique views different than urban areas as due to uh it's beauty.

✓ Honestly, I prioritize views in rural areas because they are uniquely different from urban views, mainly due to their beauty.

The original sentence misused prepositions and had unclear references: 'different than' is acceptable but 'different from' is more standard; 'as due to' is ungrammatical. Also 'there's unique views' uses singular contraction 'there's' with plural 'views' (see subject-verb agreement). Here correction focuses on prepositions and clarity by using 'different from' and 'due to'. Suggestion: use 'different from' and 'due to' or 'because of' for reasons, and ensure pronoun/reference agreement ('they' referring to views).

× Honestly I prioritise views in rural areas because there's unique views different than urban areas as due to uh it's beauty.

✓ Honestly, I prioritize views in rural areas because there are unique views different from urban areas, mainly because of their beauty.

The phrase 'there's unique views' uses the contraction 'there's' (there is) with the plural noun 'views', which is a singular/plural disagreement. Use 'there are' with plural nouns. Suggestion: match 'there is/there are' to the number of the following noun and prefer 'different from' rather than 'different than'.

× I prefer more rural areas view than urban.

✓ I prefer rural views to urban ones.

The original uses incorrect structure 'prefer more X view than Y' and missing appropriate preposition. Use 'prefer A to B' and use 'rural views' (plural) and 'urban ones' to avoid repetition. Suggestion: use 'prefer A to B' and keep noun forms consistent.

× Well, I love different type of views but I mostly prioritize views in my own nation as I love travelling to different cities in my country and there are so many places that are very attractive to me.

✓ Well, I love different types of views, but I mostly prioritize views in my own country because I enjoy traveling to different cities here, and there are so many places that attract me.

The phrase 'different type of views' should be pluralized to 'different types of views' (adjective/noun agreement). 'Nation' is less natural than 'country' in this context. 'As I love travelling' is grammatically acceptable but 'because I enjoy traveling' is clearer. 'Very attractive to me' is wordy; 'attract me' is more natural. Suggestion: pluralize 'type' when modifying plural 'views', use 'country', and use concise verb phrases.