Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 总体回答直接且内容相关，但存在冗长与语法小问题。注意句子简洁（不超过5句），使用清晰的主题句并用连接词组织细节；修正语言错误（如“one of the nearest parks”应更自然），并给出更具体的细节或感受以增强真实感。

예시: Yes, I loved going to the park near my apartment when I was a child. We often played games like hide-and-seek, rode our bikes and ran around on the grass. Because it was so close, it became our favorite place to spend whole afternoons, especially on sunny weekends.

제안: 回答内容清楚并连贯，但有些信息不太自然地堆叠（如把近视和避免举重联系在一起），应更自然地解释原因并使用连接词。可把句子拆分为主题句和支持句，提供更具体的频率或感受。

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. Because I have myopia, my doctor advised me to avoid very intense gym workouts, so I prefer walking outdoors instead. I usually go to the nearby park with my boyfriend or alone to reach my daily step goal and enjoy the fresh air.

제안: 回答意思表达上有语法与用词错误（如“are attracted with the influencer spots”不自然），且句子略长且不够精炼。建议先给直接回答，然后用2句以内的支持细节，使用准确短语（e.g. "photo-friendly spots"），并举例说明为什么会喜欢这些设施。

예시: Not really, our city already has many green spaces. However, I would like more photo-friendly features like interesting sculptures and themed spots because they attract visitors and make parks more lively and fun to visit.

제안: 回答直接但有些口语化表达和小错误（如“service delicious local food”应为“serve”）。建议先给直接回答，再补充简短原因并用连接词；用更自然的短语表达偏好，并给出具体场景或频率以丰富内容。

예시: Not really, I don't usually like traveling to visit parks. Instead, I prefer trying local restaurants that serve good food or staying at home with friends to watch my favorite soap operas on weekends.

× There was one of the nearest parks to our apartment and we often enjoyed playing there outdoors such as hide and seek or running around or biking etcetera.

✓ There was one of the nearest parks to our apartment, and we often enjoyed playing there outdoors, such as hide-and-seek, running around, or biking.

原句中“There was one of the nearest parks to our apartment”用法不自然。“There was one of the nearest parks”暗示存在某个公园，但搭配不恰当，正确表达应直接说“有一个离我们公寓最近的公园”或“one of the nearest parks”前要有清晰限定。建议在句子中加入连词并用逗号分隔列举的活动，同时将“hide and seek”拼作“hide-and-seek”。建议改为更自然的表达并加标点以提高可读性。

× So my favorite exercise for now is to go into the nearest park with my boyfriend or solo to hit my daily steps.

✓ So my favorite exercise for now is to go to the nearest park with my boyfriend or alone to get my daily steps.

原句中“solo”在此处作副词虽可理解，但更地道的用法是“alone”。另外“go into the nearest park”在此语境中通常用“go to the park”。“to hit my daily steps”口语可用，但更自然的表达为“to get my daily steps”。建议使用更常见的搭配：go to the park / alone / get my daily steps。

× as I have myopia, my doctor suggested me to avoid some intense exercises such as weight lifting.

✓ As I have myopia, my doctor suggested that I avoid some intense exercises such as weight lifting.

动词suggest后跟宾语从句时应使用“suggest that + 主语 + (should) + 动词原形”或“suggest that I avoid...”。原句用“suggested me to avoid”是不正确的宾语结构。建议改为“suggested that I avoid...”或“my doctor advised me to avoid...”。

× What I'd like to see more of are attracted with the influencer spots, interesting sculptures or photo friendly areas so people can take pictures and share them on social media.

✓ What I'd like to see more of are attractions like influencer spots, interesting sculptures, or photo-friendly areas so people can take pictures and share them on social media.

原句中“are attracted with the influencer spots”结构错误，混淆了“attract/attraction/attracted”等词性。应使用名词“attractions”而不是被动短语“attracted with”。同时“photo friendly”应连字符“photo-friendly”。建议使用“attractions like...”来列举想要看到的内容。

× Not really, because traveling to different places or parks isn't my cup of tea. I rather enjoy visiting restaurants that service delicious local food or hang out with my friends in my apartment to watch my favorite soap opera.

✓ Not really, because traveling to different places or parks isn't my cup of tea. I'd rather enjoy visiting restaurants that serve delicious local food or hang out with my friends in my apartment to watch my favorite soap operas.

原句“I rather enjoy”缺少助动词“would”的缩写“I'd rather”。此外“service delicious local food”中“service”用法不当，应使用动词“serve”。“soap opera”如果泛指多部剧集可用复数“soap operas”或保持单数视语境。建议使用“I'd rather”并改为“serve”。