Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Focus on a clear topic sentence and organize supporting details logically. Use past tense consistently when talking about childhood, avoid repetition, and keep it concise (max 3–4 short sentences). Include one specific memory to make the answer more vivid.

예시: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. Although my family had limited money, we sometimes visited a small local park where I played on the swings and fed the ducks. Those visits are one of my happiest childhood memories.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and then one or two specific reasons using linking words (for example, because/so/therefore). Replace unclear phrases like “feel life confidence” with specific benefits such as relaxation or exercise.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me relax and reduce stress. For example, walking among trees or sitting by a pond makes me feel calmer and more confident before a busy week.

제안: Answer directly and give clear, relevant reasons. Avoid confusing or unrelated remarks. Use linking words (firstly, secondly) and be specific about benefits (play space, family outings, health). Omit subjective judgments about couples unless clearly explained.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. Firstly, more parks would give children safe places to play and exercise. Secondly, families would have affordable spots for outings, which would improve community health and well-being.

제안: State the park you want to visit, then give two specific reasons. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., ‘beautiful’ for the garden, not ‘beautiful girl’) and avoid repetition. Mention a plan or when you might go to sound more natural.

예시: Yes, I would love to visit the Dubai Miracle Garden because it has thousands of colorful flowers and spectacular displays. I hope to go next year and take photos of the floral arches and themed exhibits.

× Yes, I like to go into park as a child, but my childhood like my mother had, my parents had not enough money and they can't go to with me and to the park. And I think my I like to go into park as a child.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks as a child, but during my childhood my parents did not have enough money so they could not take me to the park.

The speaker refers to childhood, which is in the past, so present tense 'like' is incorrect; use past 'liked' (Grammar Problem Type 6). 'Go into park' is unnatural and missing articles/plural; use 'going to parks' or 'the park' (Article/Plural issues, Types 1 and 22). 'My childhood like my mother had' is ungrammatical and likely confused; rewrite to 'during my childhood'. 'My parents had not enough money' mixes past tense with incorrect word order; correct to 'my parents did not have enough money' (Past tense and sentence structure, Types 5 and 26). 'They can't go to with me and to the park' mixes present modal 'can't' and wrong prepositions; use past 'could not take me to the park' (Modal/past and preposition errors, Types 4,5,11). Suggestion: keep past tense consistent, use correct articles/plurals, and simplify clauses for clarity.

× Yes, why not? I like to go in parks now because I think it may feel life confidence and and reduce stress in my life.

✓ Yes, why not? I like going to parks now because I think they make me feel more confident and reduce stress in my life.

The continuous present preference should use gerund 'going' rather than 'to go' for habitual actions (Verb + -ing form, Type 8). 'Go in parks' is incorrect preposition and plural: use 'going to parks' (Preposition and plural, Types 11 and 1). 'May feel life confidence' is awkward and incorrect: use 'make me feel more confident' (Incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs and sentence structure, Types 13 and 26). Remove duplicate 'and'. Suggestion: use 'I like going to parks' and specify effects with 'make me feel' + adjective.

× Yes, I'd like to see more facts in my city because every children can play this park and spend time with their family and because, uh, nowadays some folks have many love couples and such as love birds. I think it's not good way.

✓ Yes, I'd like to see more parks in my city because every child can play in these parks and spend time with their family. Also, nowadays some people show public displays of affection like lovebirds, which I think is not appropriate.

'More facts' is incorrect word choice; context requires 'more parks' (Word choice; treated under quantifier/word error, Type 14). 'Every children' mixes singular quantifier with plural noun; use 'every child' (Singular/plural issue, Type 1). 'Play this park' needs preposition and demonstrative/plural agreement: use 'play in these parks' (Preposition and plural, Types 11 and 1). 'Some folks have many love couples' is unclear; rewrite to 'some people show public displays of affection' for clarity (Sentence structure and word choice, Types 26 and 14). 'Not good way' requires article and structure: 'not appropriate' or 'not a good way' (Article/phrase, Types 17 and 26). Suggestion: choose accurate nouns, match singular/plural with quantifiers, and use clear phrases for opinions.

× Yes, I want to go to Dubai Miracle Garden because it is very beautiful girl and it has a lot of variety of flowers and I want to take beautiful pictures in this garden and I think next, next yes we can I can go to.

✓ Yes, I want to go to Dubai Miracle Garden because it is very beautiful and has a large variety of flowers. I want to take beautiful pictures in the garden, and I hope I can go there next time.

'It is very beautiful girl' incorrectly uses 'girl' instead of adjective 'beautiful' to describe the garden (Incorrect use of nouns/adjectives, Type 13). Use 'is very beautiful' (adjective) and remove 'girl'. 'A lot of variety of flowers' is redundant; use 'a large variety of flowers' or 'many different flowers' (Quantifier/adjective use, Types 14 and 13). The closing clause 'I think next, next yes we can I can go to' is ungrammatical and unclear; express future hope with 'I hope I can go there next time' (Future tense/ sentence structure, Types 7 and 26). Suggestion: use clear adjective phrases, correct quantifiers, and a simple future expression like 'I hope I can go there next time'.